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Started by byndbored, 2012 May 21, 14:08:51
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Quote from: Rad Thunder on 2012 May 21, 15:14:30Sounds neat. I'd like a pic maybe too. Try making your pony in this: http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=§ion=&q=pony+creator#/d47efz4
Quote from: Renatan on 2013 Oct 26, 10:42:12If I were you, I would fix that looooooong run on sentence you have in his bio. It is really weird looking, and could have easily been broken up. I actually noticed the lack of punctuation when reading it and skimmed over a large body of text to find the next period. And one more thing, although it may not be your fault since some people are simply not that great at writing: his bio is very confusing. I didn't understand it. Maybe it's the weird crosses, maybe it's the lack of punctuation, I don't know. All I know is that I struggled to understand and in the end still didn't get it and gave up. Another possible reason is because it's all crammed in. You rushed it so much that I felt more like it was a mere cut up over-view and not the whole thing. Now, don't take this the wrong way; I'm in no way saying your OC is bad, I'm just saying it could be better with a bit of work. So don't think I'm insulting you, since I actually do like him, I'm just giving you some critic so you can find areas to improve