Weaver/Chitin

[Chitin]

Spoiler: Weaver • show

Name: Weaver
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Stallion
Age: 25 (in human years)
Appearance: A red Pegasus with golden eyes, a flowing white mane and tail, and a smile always on his face. His Cutie Mark is that of a crochet hook with a strand of yarn wrapped around it, earned after making/selling scarves throughout Fillydelphia. A dark grey scarf with dull blue and green accents adorns his neck.

Bio: Weaver is a Pegasus from Fillydelphia, where he earned his cutie mark by making and selling scarves. In an attempt to further increase his scarf sales, he decided to move to Ponyville. He always has a smile on his face and is always willing to lend a helping hoof when needed, especially if it leads to making a new friend, though his boundless energy often makes it hard for some ponies to keep up with him. Despite this, he won't stop till he's either sold all of his scarves and is ready to move on to the next town, befriended every Pony in Ponyville, or both.

Weaver lives by himself on the outskirts of the village near the Everfree Forest in a quiet little shack. He often spends his nights here making new scarves to sell or just wear himself, leaving him with little time to sleep, yet he never loses an ounce of energy. However, he does seem to be constantly hungry, yet he refuses to eat, and what he does eventually eat seems to disgust him slightly. Maybe he's just used to eating higher quality food than Ponyville has to offer?

Spoiler: Chitin • show

Name: Chitin
Race: Changeling
Gender: Stallion
Age: ???
Appearance:

Spoiler: Old drawing of Chitin, currently working on making a better one • show

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A lanky, dark grey Changeling with emerald green eyes, a jagged horn, a short blue mane, and a jagged blue tail. His carapace resembles the wings of a jewel beetle with his hole-ridden wings protruding from his sides. He has three holes per hoof, one of which giving each hoof a hook-like appearance on the back. The scarf around his neck keeps the same dark grey, blue, and green colors regardless of who he becomes, often causing him to abandon it when he changes to someone other than his main disguise.

Bio: Weaver's true form, Chitin is a cold and and deceitful Changeling. Slow to trust, he often keeps to himself in the hive, leaving him with very few acquaintances. He believes himself to be one of the most (if not the most) intelligent drones amongst his brethren, though this is a false assumption and leads some to believe he has a minor superiority complex. Despite the way he acts, he's actually very loyal and is willing to lay his life on the line for the hive.

Throughout his life from hatchling to warrior, Chitin has grown to admire his ruler, Queen Chrysalis, whom he looks up to, respects, and serves without question, even going as far as to refer to her as "The Almighty Queen Chrysalis".

When given the task to scout out Ponyville for the next Changeling invasion, Chitin realized his personality would be questionable amongst the bright, cheerful Ponie's he'd be hiding amongst. After three nauseating years of studying what it meant to love and be friendly, he created a persona of his own that was his exact opposite; Weaver, a happy-go-lucky Pegasus from Fillydelphia skilled with yarn and a crochet hook who was moving to Ponyville in an attempt to increase his scarf sales. While the idea seemed perfect at the time, he soon realized there had been a drastic increase in security since the last invasion, making it harder for him to feed. Along with keeping up Weaver's boundless energy as to not draw any attention to himself, Chitin has begun to starve himself, only feeding on minute amounts of love when he is absolutely sure no one will notice. This often leaves him in a weak state of mind and sometimes causes a bit of his true personality to slip out.

It's a little hard to say whether these two count as two OCs or one, but these are the bios of my Changeling OC, Chitin, and his disguise, Weaver. Feel free to tell me what you think about them, and any helpful criticism you can offer is welcomed.

[Gracie Sky]

Aside from his undying loyalty, I know nothing about who he is... which might actually be all there is to him if his life revolves around the will of the queen.

His role as a spy among ponies, while not the most original, is still well conceived. His antics as a pony who isn't acting really pony-like leaves room for shenanigans and development.

I really wish there was more I could say about him! You must tell me more!

[Chitin]

Aside from his undying loyalty, I know nothing about who he is... which might actually be all there is to him if his life revolves around the will of the queen.

His role as a spy among ponies, while not the most original, is still well conceived. His antics as a pony who isn't acting really pony-like leaves room for shenanigans and development.

I really wish there was more I could say about him! You must tell me more!

Yes, yes, I thank you for your review and have taken your words to heart. I've expanded both Chitin and Weaver's biographies to what I hope is a more acceptable and easier to review format. I'd be happy to hear what you have to say after these revisions.

[Shadow Mare]

You draw?

[Chitin]

I'm going to college as a student in animation and media arts, so I draw a lot, but I feel there are a lot of improvements I need to make before I'll feel like I can draw well.

...But yes, I do draw, and I've been trying to teach myself how to properly draw pony anatomy, which I'm starting to get better with.

[Gracie Sky]

He's coming along nicely, but one thing I have difficulty believing is that he has the ability to completely reverse his personality while undercover. I mean, unless he has had practice being happy-go-lucky, I don't see how he could possibly pull it off on a whim. You might want to include some training regime or research on pony behavior he did in order to acquire the skills to be cheerful.