My OC (Update)

[Guardian Dreamer]

Before the begin, special thanks to Gracie Sky for the continuous feedback and critiques.

Latest update: blue
Correction: red

Name: Guardian Dreamer
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Colt (Young Adult)
Age: 19 (1000 years ago)
Coat color: white
Mane and tail color: Light Gold
Eye color: Bright Blue
Personality: Ingenuous, Loyal, Adventurous
Cutie mark: Shield-shaped Constellation

Special talent: Protect Others
Other Skills: Powerful Strength, Flying
Occupation: Warrior(1000 years ago), Weather patrol(now)
Likes: helping others
Dislikes: mindless violence, all the boring thing, bug
Favorite food: Apple Cider.
Hobbies: tracked the supernatural.
Positive traits: He is a placid pony.
Negative traits: He has a tendency to obsess over protect others.
limitations: if hear a high tone, He was panic. (only a piercing sound)
Fears: Death, Piercing high tone, Bitter cold

Spoiler: Appearance: Guardian Dreamer is a colt with a mare-ish muzzle. • show

Backstory
Guardian Dreamer was a warrior back when Equestria was on the verge of being ruled by Discord and about to be brought into an age of chaos. Many of the ponies tried to stop Discord, but most of them had been a tragic end. He was one of those victims.

Guardian Dreamer was wounded and fell off Crystal Mountain, but was frozen in time along with the rest of the Crystal Empire. He stayed this way for 1000 years before being returned to normal. During this age, Discord was reformed, but the effects of his magic still remained. Guardian Dreamer has fully recovered, but cannot go back to his original time and must adapt to the current one.

Events from that time
When Guardian Dreamer woke up, he was still in the same bad condition that he was in when he was frozen in the first place. However, he was saved from his predicament by the Crystal ponies. After being treated, he was told what had happened, how it was suddenly 1,000 years in the future for him. At first, he had difficulty grasping how long he had been frozen for and how most everything he knew disappeared into history. He felt initially resentful, although Princess Celestia helped him calm down, as well as helping him rehabilitate. Guardian Dreamer was a solider in his time, so he was assigned to be a guard, which he was rather good at doing.

After a week or so, he began feeling the weight of isolation bearing down on him. He felt so out of place in this time, he found it difficult to relate to his peers. Princess Celestia became aware of this and suggested that he stay a while at Ponyville to unwind and perhaps meet some more cheery citizens there. He reluctantly agreed to give it a shot. At first, it didn't appear to be any better, or maybe it was even worse. At least in Canterlot he could be a guard, but such security was not in demand in the quaint town of Ponyville. Sure the ponies were more open and friendly, but it sort of made him nervous at the same time and he avoided them when he could. For a while, he spent most of his time trying to figure out a way to support himself and spend his time that didn't involve talking to other ponies.

No matter how hard he tried, he could not find anything substantial to do, leaving him with two choices: go back to Canterlot or try getting help from another pony. Conscious about disappointing Princess Celestia with his lack of progress, he chose to take a risk and talk to somepony. Once he mustered the courage to ask, he found the whole process coming along very smoothly. The ponies he spoke with had no trouble finding something productive for somepony of his abilities to do and they treated him with remarkable hospitality. They gave him all sorts of odd jobs, such as helping clear up the weather or applebucking. Still, this was the first taste of friendship Guardian Dreamer felt in over 1,000 years and he realized that he thoroughly was enjoying it. He began to open himself to those around him, a process that became easier and more natural with each repetition. Eventually, he decided to throw a party for Ponyville, as a means of thanking them for the way they treated him.

The events of 1,000 years ago and the empty space in between still dwell in his thoughts often. He frequents the library of Ponyville to browse the books in hopes of finding clues that would lead him to the truth of his past. He never got to see the end of the war that he took place in a millennia ago and he wanted to see how history concluded that chapter in his life and possibly whether or not his contributions were ever acknowledged. He probably has gotten half way through all of the books there, not even including the books that are in the Canterlot library. He still has much to learn about himself and about friendship, but he is coming along very reasonably.

[super_chris85]

Well the back story is pretty good I like the whole Captain America feel to it. I would put more into his personality but it is good for the time being. other than that he seems alright to me

[Gracie Sky]

I feel like I'm reading an English translation of something; I can hardly make out what's being written.

*ahem*

Spoiler: Backstory Interpretation • show

Guardian Dreamer was a warrior back when Equestria was on the verge of being ruled by Discord and about to be brought into an age of chaos. Many of the ponies tried to stop Discord, but most of them had been killed. He was one of those victims.

Guardian Dreamer was fatally injured and fell off Crystal Mountain, but was frozen in time along with the rest of the Crystal Empire. He stayed this way for 1000 years before being returned to normal. During this age, Discord was reformed, but the effects of his magic still remained. Guardian Dreamer has fully recovered, but cannot go back to his original time and must adapt to the current one.

[Shadow Mare]

So... basically Aang?

[Guardian Dreamer]

I feel like I'm reading an English translation of something; I can hardly make out what's being written.

*ahem*

thanks. I'm poor at writing.

So... basically Aang?

No. it's my original idea. 

[Asterian Starfall]

Per request for Guardian Dreamer.

I find your OC rather interesting I must say. I definitely want to see what happens next... however there are some things that don't add up in my mind.

Firstly, his backstory isn't exactly one that's complete. You don't say who his parents are, what happened to them, or when and how he got his Cutie Mark. You explain what it means well, but how did he earn it?

Also one other thing: If he was fatally wounded when he fell off Crystal Mountain before the Empire went into stasis, then he shouldn't be alive when the Empire came out of stasis. Perhaps he came close to being killed when time froze, but if you're killed then frozen in time, you're still dead.

I think your OC is good, you just need to sort out a few more things and he'll be great.

[Guardian Dreamer]

Per request for Guardian Dreamer.

I find your OC rather interesting I must say. I definitely want to see what happens next... however there are some things that don't add up in my mind.

Firstly, his backstory isn't exactly one that's complete. You don't say who his parents are, what happened to them, or when and how he got his Cutie Mark. You explain what it means well, but how did he earn it?

Also one other thing: If he was fatally wounded when he fell off Crystal Mountain before the Empire went into stasis, then he shouldn't be alive when the Empire came out of stasis. Perhaps he came close to being killed when time froze, but if you're killed then frozen in time, you're still dead.

I think your OC is good, you just need to sort out a few more things and he'll be great.

Yup! now updated.

Correction log

Spoiler: Jul 22, 2013 • show

Name: Guardian Dreamer
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Colt
Age: 19 (1000 years ago)
Coat color: white
Mane and tail color: Light Gold
Eye color: Bright Blue
Personality: Ingenuous, Loyal, Adventurous
Cutie mark: Shield-shaped Constellation

Special talent: Flying, Protect Others, Powerful Strength
Occupation: Warrior(1000 years ago), Weather patrol(now)
Likes: helping others
Dislikes: mindless violence, all the boring thing, bug
Favorite food: Apple Cider.
Hobbies: tracked the supernatural.
Positive traits: He is a placid pony.
Negative traits: He has a tendency to obsess over protect others.
limitations: if hear a high tone, He was panic. (only a piercing sound)

Spoiler: Appearance: Guardian Dreamer is a colt with a mare-ish muzzle. • show

Spoiler: back story • show

Guardian Dreamer was a warrior back when Equestria was on the verge of being ruled by Discord and about to be brought into an age of chaos. Many of the ponies tried to stop Discord, but most of them had been a tragic end. He was one of those victims.

Guardian Dreamer was fatally wounded and fell off Crystal Mountain, but was frozen in time along with the rest of the Crystal Empire. He stayed this way for 1000 years before being returned to normal. During this age, Discord was reformed, but the effects of his magic still remained. Guardian Dreamer has fully recovered, but cannot go back to his original time and must adapt to the current one.

Spoiler: events from that time • show

Updates coming soon.

Spoiler: Jul 12, 2013 • show

Name: Guardian Dreamer
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Colt
Age: 19 (1000 years ago)
Coat color: white
Mane and tail color: Light Gold
Eye color: Clear Sky
Personality: Ingenuous, Loyal
Cutie mark: Shield-shaped Constellation

Special talent: Flying, Protect Others, Powerful Strength
Likes: helping others
Dislikes: mindless violence, all the boring thing, bug
Favorite food: Apple, sometimes... Alcohol.
Hobbies: tracked the supernatural.
Positive traits: He is very calm.
Negative traits: He has a tendency to obsess over protect others.
limitations: if hear a high tone, He was panic.

Spoiler: Appearance: Guardian Dreamer is a colt with a mare-ish muzzle. • show

Spoiler: back story • show

Guardian Dreamer was a warrior back when Equestria was on the verge of being ruled by Discord and about to be brought into an age of chaos. Many of the ponies tried to stop Discord, but most of them had been killed. He was one of those victims.

Guardian Dreamer was fatally wounded and fell off Crystal Mountain, but was frozen in time along with the rest of the Crystal Empire. He stayed this way for 1000 years before being returned to normal. During this age, Discord was reformed, but the effects of his magic still remained. Guardian Dreamer has fully recovered, but cannot go back to his original time and must adapt to the current one.