My OC; Smokeout Knight

[Smoke_out]

imagination is nice.  overconfidence, pride, inflated ego, and unwarranted self-importance to the point of being unable to accept constructive criticism is not.  perhaps it would be best to review the rules and guidelines of a community before posting something which may cause backlash.  Oh, and this is coming from a twenty-year-old university student majoring in Electrical Engineering who has a second degree black belt in Tae Kwon Do, takes multivariable calculus, physics and chemistry at the same time, understands and is fluent in four languages, and is GM of five roleplays, one of which is second in the top ten most popular threads on this forum.

it has been a pleasure meeting you, sir.

Fine then, if we're gonna talk about constructive critisizm, here's some pointers; when one person posts a response that may sound arrogent, rude and/or ignorent, try NOT to respond in the same way (as you SHOULD know seeing as you have accomplished so much) because you never know, the next OP may not be as patient is i am and may forgo the rules and respond in an unfavorable fashion.

And another note of advice; listing off such accomplishments in such a way(as i have actually realized my own stupidty) can come off just as or even more arrogent than the post you are replying to.

I will scrap Smokeout's current design and try again at a later date when i can think of something that'll ACTUALLY fit within this fandom.

So, good day to YOU sir.

which would quickly get him banned from this forum   the mods here generally have zero tolerance for rule breakers   not dictating rules here, just pointing out a fact.

a humble little comparison to your obviously superior intellect, my friend~

I will look forward to seeing your new designs when you have them completed!

A fine day to you

I apologize if i seemed like i was acting as if i was more intelligent before, and if you'd like, i could use some pointers on how to tone Smokeout down some without losing his initial concept

[The Wandering Magus]

I apologize if i seemed like i was acting as if i was mroe intelligent before, and if you'd like, i could use some pointers on how to tone Smokeout down some without losing his initial concept

we all have misunderstandings

Well, to be honest, his personality and actual current abilities (aside from immortality) are actually quite nice.  In my own opinion, which of course is just an opinion and should be taken with a grain of salt, the main problem that I see is trying to modify the canon story to an extreme extent; if he were less of a godlike being beyond even Celestia and Luna, perhaps something similar to Shining Armor or lesser in power, I do not think that there would be nearly as much of a problem.  For most here, the main serious beserk button would be immortality, changing canon in some way, and making characters somehow "more important" than others.

I hope this is not offensive, as I do not mean it to be such.

[Smoke_out]

we all have misunderstandings

Well, to be honest, his personality and actual current abilities (aside from immortality) are actually quite nice.  In my own opinion, which of course is just an opinion and should be taken with a grain of salt, the main problem that I see is trying to modify the canon story to an extreme extent; if he were less of a godlike being beyond even Celestia and Luna, perhaps something similar to Shining Armor or lesser in power, I do not think that there would be nearly as much of a problem.  For most here, the main serious beserk button would be immortality, changing canon in some way, and making characters somehow "more important" than others.

I hope this is not offensive, as I do not mean it to be such.

thank you, he kinda turned out immortal after i had finished reading "Project Sunflower" which influinced his ability of being able to become/breath smoke. His next incarnation will be far less godlike, replacing that trait will be highly potent magical abilities.

Would making it so that he was potentialy the only Pegasi who could use unicorn magic compensate a bit?

[The Wandering Magus]

we all have misunderstandings

Well, to be honest, his personality and actual current abilities (aside from immortality) are actually quite nice.  In my own opinion, which of course is just an opinion and should be taken with a grain of salt, the main problem that I see is trying to modify the canon story to an extreme extent; if he were less of a godlike being beyond even Celestia and Luna, perhaps something similar to Shining Armor or lesser in power, I do not think that there would be nearly as much of a problem.  For most here, the main serious beserk button would be immortality, changing canon in some way, and making characters somehow "more important" than others.

I hope this is not offensive, as I do not mean it to be such.

thank you, he kinda turned out immortal after i had finished reading "Project Sunflower" which influinced his ability of being able to become/breath smoke. His next incarnation will be far less godlike, replacing that trait will be highly potent magical abilities.

Would making it so that he was potentialy the only Pegasi who could use unicorn magic compensate a bit?

Actually, to be honest I do not think that the smoke transfiguration is overpowered; there are other OCs here that have similar abilities such as turning to water, which are actually quite liked by the rest of the community.  Comparatively, I think that being a unicorn magic-capable pegasus would be more of a power that would seem "overpowered" here, as technically "Alicorns" are pegasi with unicorn capabilities, or vice versa.

[Smoke_out]

we all have misunderstandings

Well, to be honest, his personality and actual current abilities (aside from immortality) are actually quite nice.  In my own opinion, which of course is just an opinion and should be taken with a grain of salt, the main problem that I see is trying to modify the canon story to an extreme extent; if he were less of a godlike being beyond even Celestia and Luna, perhaps something similar to Shining Armor or lesser in power, I do not think that there would be nearly as much of a problem.  For most here, the main serious beserk button would be immortality, changing canon in some way, and making characters somehow "more important" than others.

I hope this is not offensive, as I do not mean it to be such.

thank you, he kinda turned out immortal after i had finished reading "Project Sunflower" which influinced his ability of being able to become/breath smoke. His next incarnation will be far less godlike, replacing that trait will be highly potent magical abilities.

Would making it so that he was potentialy the only Pegasi who could use unicorn magic compensate a bit?

Actually, to be honest I do not think that the smoke transfiguration is overpowered; there are other OCs here that have similar abilities such as turning to water, which are actually quite liked by the rest of the community.  Comparatively, I think that being a unicorn magic-capable pegasus would be more of a power that would seem "overpowered" here, as technically "Alicorns" are pegasi with unicorn capabilities, or vice versa.

Touche, i was only throwing that out there because i didn't know if his ability to become smoke should count as unicorn magic or otherwise something similar

[The Wandering Magus]

Touche, i was only throwing that out there because i didn't know if his ability to become smoke should count as unicorn magic or otherwise something similar

As I've said, I think power-wise the OC is fine   Just the backstory and immortality would be unadvised, in my humble opinion.  Personally I can understand being frustrated with changing stories, as I've had criticism of my writing in the past, but in the end it is my personal belief that allowing multiple opinions to shape a story makes it more well-rounded and realistic in the end.  Again, no offense meant in any way, shape or form.

[Smoke_out]

Touche, i was only throwing that out there because i didn't know if his ability to become smoke should count as unicorn magic or otherwise something similar

As I've said, I think power-wise the OC is fine   Just the backstory and immortality would be unadvised, in my humble opinion.  Personally I can understand being frustrated with changing stories, as I've had criticism of my writing in the past, but in the end it is my personal belief that allowing multiple opinions to shape a story makes it more well-rounded and realistic in the end.  Again, no offense meant in any way, shape or form.

None taken, i completely understand. I'm just very stubborn and it sometimes takes someone snapping at me to kick me out of that.

[The Wandering Magus]

Touche, i was only throwing that out there because i didn't know if his ability to become smoke should count as unicorn magic or otherwise something similar

As I've said, I think power-wise the OC is fine   Just the backstory and immortality would be unadvised, in my humble opinion.  Personally I can understand being frustrated with changing stories, as I've had criticism of my writing in the past, but in the end it is my personal belief that allowing multiple opinions to shape a story makes it more well-rounded and realistic in the end.  Again, no offense meant in any way, shape or form.

None taken, i completely understand. I'm just very stubborn and it sometimes takes someone snapping at me to kick me out of that.

I'm glad we understand each other a little better now   and I apologize for having acted a bit harsh myself

[Perry The Pony]

This is the 10th report I got on this thread so it is now locked.