Short Story: Fluttertree (Discussion

Started by The Wandering Magus, 2012 Oct 23, 18:09:07

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The Wandering Magus

Short story: http://forum.legendsofequestria.com/index.php?topic=5367

Just a little something I wrote after hearing about the meme, not much else to it.  Any thoughts?
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Stitchin Time

Adorable little thing, but... did Fluttershy turn into a tree?

The Wandering Magus

Quote from: Stitchin Time on 2012 Oct 23, 21:46:34
Adorable little thing, but... did Fluttershy turn into a tree?
it's like... she got her "last wish" to be a tree, or something :P
(sorry Bakasan, chose this image)
Descriptions and art of my OCs here: http://legendsofequestria.com/forum/index.php?topic=2636
my art: http://legendsofequestria.com/forum/index.php?topic=298
visiting soldier sister, be back 8/12/2013

Stitchin Time

Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Oct 23, 22:04:10
Quote from: Stitchin Time on 2012 Oct 23, 21:46:34
Adorable little thing, but... did Fluttershy turn into a tree?
it's like... she got her "last wish" to be a tree, or something :P


Awwwww. :')

Firefly

This is quite a cute little story :)
The expressions has to be a little clearer, though.
I could only put the story together after you said that Fluttershy was the tree  >.< So try to give the reader a clearer idea in the future; don't leave them hanging and not knowing what to think or imagine  lol
Apart from that, I'd say the use of descriptive language was pretty effective  :]
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The Wandering Magus

Quote from: Firefly on 2012 Oct 25, 00:07:06
This is quite a cute little story :)
The expressions has to be a little clearer, though.
I could only put the story together after you said that Fluttershy was the tree  >.< So try to give the reader a clearer idea in the future; don't leave them hanging and not knowing what to think or imagine  lol
Apart from that, I'd say the use of descriptive language was pretty effective  :]
was trying to intentionally leave it vague for a sense of mystery or something, but I suppose some clarification would help :P  thanks for the advice!
(sorry Bakasan, chose this image)
Descriptions and art of my OCs here: http://legendsofequestria.com/forum/index.php?topic=2636
my art: http://legendsofequestria.com/forum/index.php?topic=298
visiting soldier sister, be back 8/12/2013

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