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Started by The Wandering Magus, 2012 Oct 23, 18:09:07
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Quote from: Stitchin Time on 2012 Oct 23, 21:46:34Adorable little thing, but... did Fluttershy turn into a tree?
Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Oct 23, 22:04:10Quote from: Stitchin Time on 2012 Oct 23, 21:46:34Adorable little thing, but... did Fluttershy turn into a tree?it's like... she got her "last wish" to be a tree, or something
Quote from: Firefly on 2012 Oct 25, 00:07:06This is quite a cute little story The expressions has to be a little clearer, though.I could only put the story together after you said that Fluttershy was the tree So try to give the reader a clearer idea in the future; don't leave them hanging and not knowing what to think or imagine Apart from that, I'd say the use of descriptive language was pretty effective