Cobalt Cloud & Spring Melody (WIP) (Story link added to first post.)

Started by Rissian, 2012 May 01, 04:35:12

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Rissian

(New OC added to the bottom of this post.)

(I am not a very good artist at all so I ended up using the pony creator, and coat of arms creator.)

Armorless Cobalt :



Armored Cobalt :
http://i88.photobucket.com/albums/k185/Alecsandar1111/Cobalt%20Forest%20Entrance_zps2c0189e5.jpg

(Please criticize as much that is needed I'd rather make a good character than a bad one.)

Name : Cobalt Cloud (May be done soon.)

Gender : Male

Age : Young Stallion (18-20 in MLP years.)

Species : Earth Pony

Fur Color : Various shades of blue

Mane Color : Dark Blue

Eye Color : Emerald Green

Height : Slightly shorter then Mr Cake.

Weight : Average/below average.

Cutie Mark : A Shield Crest

Area of Residence : Everfree Forest

Duty : Charges himself with leading lost travelers to safety out of the everfree forest if they wander near his house.

Special Talent :Heavy Stance. Using a special stance passed down in his family Cobalt is able to grip the ground with his hooves while wearing armor to negate some strong physical strikes, early on when his parents were teaching him how to defend himself he showed a special knack with defending himself from physical attacks without flinching but due to the nature of this stance it cannot be used for too long as it puts massive strain on the body. Holding the stance too long could cause muscle injury to the hind legs in the worst case scenario walking would be impossible until the injury heals.

Coat of Arms : http://i88.photobucket.com/albums/k185/Alecsandar1111/Fancharacters/Pony%20OCS/e7665b2d.jpg

Biography : Cobalt Cloud is from a heritage of self proclaimed Earth Pony Knights that often rescued travelers from the dangers of the everfree forest, he is the last surviving member of his family not much is known about his parents as he tends to keep to himself about personal matters, and he may downright rudely refuse to talk about his past if anyone tried to learn more about his relatives. But despite this he tries to live up to his family's coat of arms, and the values his family put in them.

Family Values :

Boldness
The trait of being willing to undertake things that involve risk or danger.

Courtesy
The showing of politeness in one's attitude and behavior toward others.

Honesty
A knight is nothing without being Honest.

Disciplined
Show a controlled form of behavior or way of working.

Personality :
Despite his constant serious look, if you avoid sensitive conversational subjects he can be rather friendly and will even crack a smile often but hit one of these subjects by mistake and his personality sometimes changes. Often causing him to ignore some of his values, and also refusing to continue the conversation, it is often believed he carries a slight scar from his past despite not many but him knowing what happened. He firmly believes in keeping his family's values but still manages to fail them, only very few ponies managed to make a breakthrough about his past one of them being Spring Melody. (Another WIP pony OC.)

Favorite item : A photo of his parents he keeps with him at all times.



Preferred gear : The last few pieces of his family's armor, though he only wears it in the forest,

Favorite dinner spot : Ponyville's café.

(Whew this took a few hours to write and I'm not even sure I'm done yet as it still feels like a work in progress, I'm also trying to avoid a mary-sue/gary-stu syndrome, but it often results in my characters not being fleshed out much, so hopefully I did better, and hopefully it isn't too out place for the series.)
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Indigo Cloud :
http://i88.photobucket.com/albums/k185/Alecsandar1111/Fancharacters/Pony%20OCS/7b63c562.jpg
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Midnight Cloud :
http://i88.photobucket.com/albums/k185/Alecsandar1111/Fancharacters/Pony%20OCS/88f0046e.jpg
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(WIP OC.)

Picture :



Name : Spring Melody

Gender : Female

Age : Young Mare (About 21 in MLP years.)

Species : Unicorn

Fur Color : A cyan & green mix

Mane Color : Cherry Blossom Pink.

Eye Color : A bright blue

Height : Average mane six height maybe 2 inches taller or shorter.

Weight : Average often eats healthy food, fruits vegetables hay.

Cutie Mark : Musical Notes

Occupation : One of  ponyville's musicians.

Special Talent : Magic Music using enchanted scrolls.


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True Light : Pegasus OC.

http://forum.legendsofequestria.com/index.php?topic=4272.0


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Story the characters take part in.
The Knights of Everfree.
http://forum.legendsofequestria.com/index.php?topic=3764.0

daswed

I´m liking this knight idea.

Rissian

I thought I may as well re-post since I'm slowly adding another OC to the first post.  ovO

(Bio and personality coming soon. for Spring Melody.)

Sponk

I'll be honest. It kinda scares me his parents have the same colors basically. Is that a coincidence or something? o.O
Sorry if I'm offending you somehow. >.<
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Rissian

Actually it kind of is a coincidence I was trying to make him look related to them I suppose his dads color could change and say he takes after his mom, I didn't think about this when designing his parents so yeah that is kind of creepy when you think about it, but don't worry it's not what you think, it's me not paying attention when designing relatives, I'll likely change his dads fur color to fix that issue. I wonder how many other people thought that.  :')

Sponk

Blah blah blah.

Rissian

Alright I fixed the way his dad looks hes still blue but no where near the same shade, and the eye color is different now and the hoof color is different now, hopefully it's less creepy as well since the mane was also changed, Cobalt and his mother are more of a cyan greenish blue where as Indigo Cloud is more of a solid blue with less saturation, if it still needs adjusting please give me a heads up.

(Not to mention his mother is a paint pony where as his father is a solid shade one.)

Sponk

I think it looks more creepy now. You need to change up there colors a bit.
You should change how the parents look a bit(More color variety).
Twilight Sparkles parents colors don't look anything like Twilights!
Blah blah blah.

Rissian

Honestly how can they look creepy when the shade of the fur eye color and hoof colors are different the pony creator colors are limited and I really don't want Indigo to be green his names Indigo because hes blue same for Cobalt and the same for Midnight all are different shades of blue changing it would bother me to the point of changing the names since I made them based around those colors, unless you can describe more of why it makes it creepy I'm not likely to change it again as it ruins my original design for their name to match the way they look.

(Granted Midnight's shade of blue needs to be changed since midnight is a darker shade which I will get around to fixing soon so shes at least different from Cobalt.)

Sponk

Sorry. I just think one of there colors need to change a bit. x3
Blah blah blah.

Rissian

Sorry I'm not trying to sound rude or defensive I just like a more solid reason to change something rather then someone not liking the color as you can't appeal to everyone with small details like that, not to mention it's pretty minor, so can you explain why you think it should be changed other then more variety?  :')

(Another reason they are dark shades of blue is so they blend into the everfree kind of like a natural camouflage, they are knights of everfree so blending in helps them defend against creatures and such.)

Sponk

Well.  Midnight Cloud doesn't have to be blue.

Her color can change right? but more to a different color. Somehow?
I think it'd be great then. 0:)
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Rissian

Midnight is a really dark shade of blue so when she is changed she will look drastically different, that I can do since it matches her name.

(I'll probably get around to doing that now.)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Midnight_blue

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cobalt_blue

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Indigo_blue

This is where the names came from and is a running joke I wanted to do with the designs by making them have fur color related to their names.

Sponk

Quote from: Trege on 2012 Jul 23, 05:56:15
Midnight is a really dark shade of blue so when she is changed she will look drastically different, that I can do since it matches her name.

(I'll probably get around to doing that now.)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Midnight_blue
Oh. x3
Blah blah blah.

Rissian

Alright I may have reached a solution I started messing with the colors again and found one I like but before I fix the family photo I'll post this first.



Hopefully she has enough color variety now.

Sponk

Blah blah blah.

Rissian

I actually like her new colors a lot myself compared to her old ones, she looks more unique now at least, now I have to figure out what to do with Spring Melody's personality and bio, I got a few ideas from the OC criticism thread now to just make them into something a lot bigger.  ovO

Firefly

I really really wanna know more about spring melody :) what relationship does she hold with armorless cobalt??  ;)
[move=6][/move]Thanks Skardan (signature) and Fudgemuffin (avatar) :D
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Rissian

I'm writing a fanfiction so whenever it gets developed enough you can find out it's coming a long pretty slowly but still moving and she doesn't appear in it for awhile since it's going to cover Cobalt's story from his age in the family photo onward, and what happened to his parents.  :D

(And by slow I mean I haven't even got her bio done yet, and only the prologue to the fiction is done currently and even then I may have to change it as I'm not sure it's good enough to be posted yet.)

Shes planned to be one of his close friends but how they met will be told in the fiction when I get to that point.

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