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2014 Jun 12, 11:09:46 Last Edit: 2016 Feb 13, 06:09:54 by Naura
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Naura:
Name: Naura
Age: 15 (In my head canon the mane 6 is around 22)
Race: Earth Pony
Gender: Mare
Eye Color and Accessories- Scarlet with a bow of the same color in her mane.
Main Color: Light limegreen
Mane Color: Dark-ish Green
Weaknesses: She often jumps to conclusions, which often leads her into trouble, her ears are very sensitive, so too loud noises can make her faint. She's also short tempered.
Likes: Taking care of ponies, eating candy, dancing, winning arguments, spreading joy and feeling alive.
Personality: She is a bit hostile/shy towards strangers, otherwise caring, cheerful, lively, overprotective, determined and creative thinking. She is also Bisexual.
Cutiemark: Blank flank.
Poison Joke effect: Switches her front legs with her hind legs and vice versa.
Spoiler: Pictures of her: • show


Made by me. (This is why I don't draw)

Made by LarryMclie.

Made by Silverfan118.

Made by Jenzy.

From Secret Santa 2014 so I don't know who drew it.

More facts:
[Spoiler]1:What's your OCs favorite color?
Pink and Red.

2:Where does your OC work?
She is a foalsitter/owner of an orphanage.

3:What's your OCs favorite food?
Chocolate.

4:Does your OC have a favorite drink?
Milk.

5:How old is your OC?
15

6:Does your OC have any supernatural powers?
Nope.

7:Is your OC in a relationship?
No.

8:What are some of your OCs strengths?
She is good with foals and always optimistic.

9:What are some of your OCs weaknesses?
She takes the fastest away explanations which often leads her into trouble, and she's short tempered.

10:What is your OCs favorite outfit?
Nothing.

11:What is your OCs spirit animal?
A Pangolin.

12:Is your OC currently in school?
No.

13:What is your OCs earliest memory?
Her dad stealing from the cookie har together with her.

14:Do your OC like the nature?
Yeah.

15:What makes your OC angry?
Bullying and being made fun of.

16:When is your OCs favorite time of year?
Spring.

17:Can your OC swim?
Nope.

18:What is your OCs favorite holiday?
Hearts Warming Eve, because of the story telling.

19:What usually bums your OC out?
When she can't live up to someones hopes or when she can't get something she really wants.

20:What is the first thing that someone would notice about your OC?
The way she wears her mane, in a ponytail.

21:Has your OC ever been arrested?
Nope.


22:What does your OC smell like?
Vanilla.

23:Is your OC social?
Shy to new ponies, almost annoying to the ones who know her (big mouthed).

24:What race is your OC?
Earth Pony.

25:What languages does your OC speak?
Most equestrian languages.

26:What kind of clothes or accessories does your OC wear?
A red bow that holds up her mane.

27:Does your OC believe in fairies?
Yes, she has seen them. Or well, she has seen Breezies, who she thought were fairies.

28:Would you call your OC adventurous?
A little.

29:Does your OC cry easily?
No.

30:What was your OCs first word?
Oh.

31:Does your OC have any pets?
No.

32:Who is your OCs biggest enemy?
She got none.

33:What gender is your OC?
Female.

34:What are your OCs hobbies?
Spending time with friends and reading books.

35:Does your OC drink coffee or tea?
Sometimes tes.

36:How does your OC feel about insects?
She likes them, she finds them interesting.

37:What color eyes does your OC have?
Rose/blood red.

38:Is your OC loyal?
Yes.

39:Does your OC tolerate violence?
She have nothing against small sibling fights, but if somepony starts to get hurt, she will not hesitate to do her best to end the fight.

40:What country was your OC born in?
Equestria.

Background story:
[Spoiler]Naura's full name is just that, Naura. Her childhood wasn't too great, of what she can remember.
Her family was kind, but her mom was always a little distant. When seven years old she rolled off the family's carriage when they were moving, she fell off when they were passing Everfree forest, and the last thing she saw of her family was her mum's face turning around when she had rolled away from her. During that time, she didn't know that her parent's had left her for good, she took it kindly.

She went back into Ponyville, only to find their house abandoned. She cleaned it up since they had left in a hurry. Then she waited, waited for her parents to return, being so incredibly naive thinking it was just a joke. But they didn't. She started walking around town, and kind ponies usually gave her food. But that wasn't enough, she started doing minor jobs, such as cleaning places, working as a translator, being a nanny, and suddenly three years had passed.

One day while reading books in the library, a unicorn her age came up to her. She was at first a little shy, and so was Naura, so they just stood there, quiet, looking at each other for a minute. Then an earth pony filly jumped up between them. She was filled with such sweetness Naura had a hard time not answering her questions. Then the unicorn spoke up, who in the first place had wanted to talk to Naura since she had seen her there so many times before. They talked for a while, and then she had suddenly made her first friends, Sabrina and Cinnamon Kiss.

Some years later, when she and her new friends took a trip to Manehatten, where they met a dark mare called Hazy Rhyme. She was a few years younger than them, and was a writer, but not so famous. She wished to live in a calmer place where she could find more inspiration. So they brought her with them to Ponyville, so she started to give out books there, and since there wasn't many writers in Ponyville, they were quickly found. A lot of ponies really liked her books, and Naura even started going over to her multiple times only so she could read them before they were released.

Later Naura befriended two ponies, who a month later had to leave for Manehatten, but couldn't bring their young filly with them. So they asked Naura if she could take care of her while they were gone, and she said yes. The little filly was a pegasus with the name of Bright Grace. Bright Grace was a filly filled with such passion and determination so that when her parents replied that they might be gone longer then they expected, both Naura and Grace was more than happy to live together for a while. She was a blank flank too, and quickly got along with Naura and her other friends.

Later, one day while playing with Grace in a park, a young filly unicorn was found. It was under a syringa bush, so they named the little orphan Syringa Scent. They asked around, but couldn't find her parents, so they decided to keep her with them. They bought her a little white bow and gave her a warm home.

About a month later, when Naura went out to get Syringa some baby food, she saw a stray earth pony colt, with some unique leg markings, sell a pony something that looked like an ordinary rock. She was a little confused by how much the other pony wanted to buy it, but thought it maybe was a rare mineral and decided to ignore it. Some minutes later after getting what she had gone out for, she stumbled into the colt again. He gave her a bored look, and said:
"I like your bow, can I buy it?" Naura was confused by the question. She was also a little angry, did he think he could just walk up to her and think she would sell it like that?
"Uh, no, its special to me." Right after she spoke, the colts eyes lit up.
"I am homeless, I live with you now, okay?" He said and jumped into the cart she had brought. She opened her mouth, but quickly closed it again. She did take care of orphans, but this one, it was something about him. She have him a puzzled look before bringing him home, where she introduced him to the other foals. Syringa didn't seem to mind at all, while the colt, who went by the name Hyper, got into a sibling-like fight with Grace. Naura quickly got around to enjoy those two try to show her that they were the best, making Grace act a little more appropriate than before.
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Cinnamon Kiss:
Name: Cinnamon Kiss
Age: 16
Race: Earth Pony
Gender: Mare
Eye Color and Accessories: Corn color, no accessories.
Main Color: Brown
Mane Color: Red and White.
Weakness(es): When she can't help on something important for other reasons (like being sick) and bullies.
Likes: Helping ponies, talking, knowing she is doing good, hearing good jokes and making her friends happy.
Personality: Happy, adaptable, immodest, caring, kind and funny.
Cutiemark: An aid box with a heart over the plus.
Poison Joke effect: Not decided.
Pictures I have of her:
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Made by StarSong

Background story:
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Was born in Ponyville. She spent most of her childhood there, except for the times she went to Canterlot to meet up with her relatives. During her time there, she got to know a filly named Sabrina, who later moved to her town when they both were three years old.

They started the same school, and became, like every filly, excited to get their cutiemarks. Sabrina got her when they were playing with a ball, Cinnamon had by mistake shot it up in a tree, then Sabrina got it down by using her magic. When the ball was down on the ground, Sabrina's cutiemark appeared as a blue star. Cinnamon started getting bullied three months later. She was by that time, the last foal in her class to get her cutiemark. Sabrina protected her from the bullies, but Cinnamon didn't get past the memories of the bullies too easily.

But around two months later, she got her cutiemark. One of the foals at their school had fallen of the swing, so Cinnamon helped him wash out of the wound on his knee and put on a patch. The foal who had hurt himself, was first really surprised, since he had been bullying her before, but she went with him to their teacher and when he was completely checked up on, she gave his knee a kiss, and that's when she received her long awaited cutiemark. It was an aid box with a heart on, resembling her way to take care of ponies and talk them through mildly scary and painful times, such as hospital visits. Together with Sabrina she was overjoyed.

Some months after their school time was over, Cinnamon and Sabrina stumbled upon a mare in the local library. She looked a little odd to them, being a rather grown up filly, without a cutiemark. They started seeing her there more often, and one day Sabrina decided to talk to her one day. Cinnamon was at first planning to just stand aside, but when Sabrina and the filly didn't talk, she jumped up between them and started a conversation. It was easy with her ability to make ponies feel secure to talk, and soon they got to know her name, being Naura, and after some more chatting they decided to meet up at the library again and that started their lifelong friendship.

Later when they were on a vacation to Manehatten, on their way to the train station to go home, they met a unicorn called Hazy Rhyme. At first she didn't say anything, being even more shy than Naura had been, but when Cinnamon spotted her cutiemark, that looked like three ink splats, she asked what her talent was. She was apparently a writer, but she couldn't work in the big city, since she almost never got a calm moment. Cinnamon decided to bring her back with them and bought her a train ticket, and back in Ponyville, they quickly became closer friends.

Nowadays, Cinnamon Kiss works as a nurse at the hospital, talking to her visitors to calm them down. She lives together with one of the other nurses and Sabrina in a little house in Ponyville, and couldn't be happier.

Hyper:
Spoiler: Hyper: • show

Name: Hyper
Age: 8
Race: (Extra fluffy) Earth Pony
Gender: Colt
Eye Color and Accessories: Pineapple colored.
Main Color: Light yellow cream colored, and dark brown legs.
Mane Color: Red with white/light pink stripes.
Weakness(es): When other ponies of the same personality comes along.
Likes: Playing games, winning arguments, puns and teasing Grace.
Personality: A bit of a clutz, stubborn, happy when he gets his way, but other wise described as a "meh" personality.
Cutiemark: Three coins with white stars on them, a salesman.
Poison Joke effect: His colors are all switched to different shades of pink.
Spoiler: Background story: • show
Hyper had never liked being around other ponies, they were all so easy to fool. He lived in Ponyville, on the streets, where he used his talent to make ponies give him coins for random stuff he found on the streets, which made it so he never had to go hungry, or without water. This particular day, he was out on the market area, selling small rocks he found in the ditch. He got some bits, but knew that his ability could only give him so much for something like that, the more value things had, the more he could make the ponies he sold them too pay him. While thinking about this, he bumped into a young mare. She was lime green and had a red bow in her hair, a pretty red bow. His instincts quickly made him try to get the bow from her, so he could sell it to somepony else. He put on his poker face and asked her with a voice without any emotion:
"I like your bow, can I buy it?" Then the mare did something unusual, she gave him a puzzled look, and said, with a slightly annoyed tone:
"Uh, no, its special to me." Hypers eyes lit up. This was the first pony to ever say no to him when it came to buying and selling things. Finally somepony that wasn't completely stupid. He needed to stay with this mare.
"I am homeless, I live with you now, okay?" Hyper grunted and jumped into the cart she had behind her. She opened her mouth, but quickly closed it again. He smiled and was a little confused over her not protesting. He got to know her name was Naura, weird name, and that she was a foalsitter, but at the time only took care of two other fillies. When they got to her home, he was introduced to them. The youngest one, Syringa Scent, was so young she couldn't speak, but she didn't fall for him wanting to buy any of her toys, so he found her to pass the test. The older one though, Bright Grace, was a real sport nerd. She was fun to tease, but also good at pranks, so they got along, even if they fought most of the time. He stopped using his ability, and almost never left the house, since he had never been as well treated anywhere else.


Picture I have of him:
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Made by me.

Made by Bakasan94
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Bright Grace:
Name: Bright Grace
Age: 7
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Filly
Eye Color and Accessories: Dark pink and a tassel of the same color on the end of her tail.
Main Color: Light red
Mane Color: Two shades of cendre.
Weakness(es): Thunder, being made fun of, and washing herself, she doesn't care how much mud her mane got in it.
Likes: The ocean, sports, friends, playing jokes on ponies, flying and watching Rainbow Dash preform.
Personality: Dazzling, quick, golly, she is always up for a good match or game, preferably in the air, and she is a bad loser.
Cutiemark: None.
Poison Joke effect: Turns into a unicorn.
Spoiler: Pictures I got of her: • show


I tried redoing the tail, and added a part showing where the ribbon should be, but now its too big...

Made by StormDancer

Background story:
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A young pegasus filly who's parents had to go away to another town for some months because of work, but they couldn't take her with them for the time, so they put her with a earth pony who was going to be her foalsitter, a pony named Naura. Bright now lives with the mare in Naura's little cottage in Everfree forest, playing and having fun with Naura and others. She loves playing nice jokes on ponies she knows, is stubborn and helpful. She loves going down to the beach and picking pretty shells that she can make into necklace's she gives out to friends. Her favorite activities is defeating Hyper in anyway possible, watching Rainbow Dash do anything, and preforming in different sports.


Humming Honey:
Name: Humming Honey
Age: 13
Race: Pegasus
Gender: Young Mare
Eye Color and Accessories: Orange, she also have an orange fabric-covered tiara, and two orange clips in the same color.
Main Color: Honey colored.
Mane Color: Coffee brown with a stripe of a slightly lighter shade of brown.
Weakness(es): Her wings are a little bit misformed (genetics) which makes her have to fly like a humming bird, instead of flying like a normal pegasus, which takes a lot of energy, so she doesn't fly a lot.
Likes: Working hard, walking through the forests around her, listening to calm music, watching birds.
Personality: Is a workaholic, kind, shy, naive, . She loves watching birds.
Cutiemark: A little orange smiling bird, her talent being bird watching.
Poison Joke effect: She sneezes uncontrollably, and scares away all the birds.
Pictures:
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Made by Night Pony.

Spoiler: Background story: • show
Really active as a baby, flying was no real problem since her wings didn't seem bad at first. Heck, she was so great her parents expected her to become a Wonder Bolt when she grew up, but as she got older, her wings didn't really want to change with her age. After being grounded, being left down on earth instead of going to a school in Cloudsdale, she started exploring the ground more. She liked the forests, it was a lot of trees there that she was able to climb and practice her flying in a little so she could at least float over the ground with full control.

One day she saw a cute bird, and started to follow it, jumping between branches as the bird flew. When the bird noticed her, she was so surprised she fell backwards and down into a bush. She passed out, but soon some ponies playing nearby came by and woke her up. They told her they had heard some weird chirping noises from the forest. She thanked them and went home. The same night, she woke up by the same orange bird pecking on her window. She opened it and let the bird in. She spent her following days studying it, and not so soon after, she received her cutiemark, which was the orange bird, who she later took in as a pet and named Isabelle.

She now works with watching and documenting birds, which means she travels all over Equestria together with her little bird pal Isabelle. Otherwise she likes to go see the Wonder Bolts preform when they are in whatever town she currently is in.



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Sabrina:
Names: Sabrina (Is actually named Saber Wisher, but goes by Sabrina because of her talent not being saber related)
Age: 16.
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Mare
Eye Color and Accessories: Azure, and a navy vest.
Main Color: Purple/blue
Mane Color: Blue and wheat blonde.
Likes: Teaching and learning.
Personality: Over protective, confident, dutiful and clear-headed.
Weakness(es): Needles and Timberwolves.
Cutiemark: A blue star with yellow beams coming out from behind it.
Poison Joke effect: She gets the memory of a goldfish.
Spoiler: Pictures I got of her: • show


Made by Ramisha.

Made by me.

Spoiler: Background Story: • show
As a little filly, Sabrina lived in Canterlot with her parents and her older sister. Sabrina was usually pretty okay with life in Canterlot, until she met a little filly her age called Cinnamon Kiss, who was from Ponyville. When she found out how nice and caring the ponies from Ponyville was, she immediately wanted to move there. Sabrina suddenly did not like how cocky and proud the other ponies was in Canterlot, and her parents understood that. When she was three years old, she and her parents moved to Ponyville, but her big sister stayed in since she was one of the few female guards in Canterlot. Her sister gave Sabrina a book with spells so she wouldn't forget her.

When she came to Ponyville, she met up with Cinnamon Kiss again and begun school together. They were both curious of what their cutiemarks would be and usually did things to find out. One time while they were just playing with a ball, Cinnamon by mistake shot it up a tree. But Sabrina knew that was one of Cinnamon's favorite toys, so Sabrina tried a levitation spell that was in the book from her sister. She closed her eyes and started to try it. After a minute she heard Cinnamon gasp, and when she looked they ball was on the ground, but Cinnamon had her eyes on Sabrina's flank, where a Blue star had appeared. She was then the second pony in their class who had her cutiemark.

Time passed, and soon Cinnamon was the only pony left in class without her cutiemark. Colts and fillies started bullying her. Sabrina could feel how bad her friend was treated, so she started protecting her, using her magic and levitating sticks around bullies, saving she could poke their flanks with it. Nopony believed her until one day she actually did it to a filly who was going to far on Cinnamon. Their teacher asked Sabrina why she did it, Sabrina thought the teacher would just tell her to never do that stuff and scold her. But when she found out that the teacher agreed that she would've done the same, Sabrina saw a whole new world open. By living in Canterlot her first years of her life, she thought most adults was mean and cocky, but the kindness showed by her teacher that day, made her never hurt anypony, except if they were going over the top. Later Cinnamon got her cutiemark. It was a aid box, and for some time they used to joke about Sabrina beating the bullies and Cinnamon would take care of them later. Because Sabrina never told anypony about her teacher, who had shown her real kindness. She and her sister became role models for her, and because of her rarely seeing her sis, she met the teacher often, not only for school, but for life lessons.

But then they had a field trip with the class, and she got separated with Cinnamon in a forest. Sabrina got unlucky and walked into a timberwolf pup, who was probably just playing, but scared the soul out of Sabrina. Cinnamon luckily found a way led them out of there, but Sabrina had some nightmares a few weeks after the incident.

Some years later, one day while only Sabrina and Cinnamon was visiting the library to look up something for school, they met a strange green filly, who was a blank flank. Odd, they thought, but didn't really mind her. But after a few times of seeing her there without any other pony, Sabrina felt like she needed to ask who the filly was. However, when she went up to her, and cleared her throat to get her attention, she was surprised by the intense red of the filly's eyes, and just froze for a minute. luckily, Cinnamon showed up and broke the ice. After a minute of talking, they got to know she was living alone in a building without any pony else, they decided that they were gonna be her friends.

Some years later, when the tree fillies had turned into mares, they took a trip to Manehatten where they met a unicorn called Hazy Rhyme. Her talent was writing, but the writing business wasn't so big in Manehatten, and she wanted to be a book writer in a quiet little town. They brought her with the train back to Ponyville, and together with Sabrina, Cinnamon Kiss and Naura, they built her a house where she could write. They brought her into their friend group and the four of them became besties.


Hazy Rhyme:
Names: Hazy Rhyme
Age: 14.
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Mare
Eye Color and Accessories: Pear, no accessories.
Main Color: Dark Gray
Mane Color: Grayish Blue/Green
Weakness(es): She hates the ocean/sea, she is afraid of octopuses, crabs and fish.
Likes: Writing books, reading, spending time with friends and listening to others.
Personality: Calm, gentle, shy, naive, amiable and mysterious.
Cutiemark: Ink splat
Poison Joke effect: Not decided.
Pictures I got of her:
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Both made by GlassMirror.

Made by LarryMcLie

A little update version of her mane and tail style, made by me.

Spoiler:  Background Story • show

Once upon a time Hazy Rhyme was a little white foal, with the name Beauty Belle. Her parents was two white unicorns who was from the family Belle, a unicorn genus that was very proud to be unicorns and over their white coats. The genus was hated tho, for it was said that if someone got a foal or married a pony who wasn't white nor was a unicorn was abandoned by the family, saying it wasn't their foal. Her parents had been really proud when they had a daughter with white fur and orange/red mane. They expected big things of her, like becoming a superstar. She wasn't very much for singing or being a model like the rest of the family. Instead she found fun writing. One time she wrote a story in school, and read it for her class. When she went of the stage and sat back in the class, she noticed some ink on her flank. She tried to wash it off, until the teacher came and told her that it was her cutie mark, she had a talent of writing. Her mother first got mad, but her dad liked great stories, so he was mostly happy, and after a while her mom got used to it.

Two years later she went to a park, her parents sitting on a bench nearby. Hazy(Beauty) however sat and wrote, she got inspiration in the park. But suddenly something happened. A changeling jumped on her, she screamed for her parents, and felt a little nibble on one of her legs. The next second a beam of light passed. Her dad chased off the changeling, and her mom helped her up. She went down to the river to wash her coat, and suddenly gave up a scream. Her leg where the changeling apparently bit her was getting darker and darker. She watched in the river as her coat got black and her mane all sloppy and got a greenish color. She turned around and saw her mom stand up on a hill before her. She looked down at her filly with her mane covering the eyes. Beauty yelled."Mom, help me!" But her mom just turned around and left her alone. She had heard stories about the family leaving their foals alone, but she never believed them. She was by that time 10 years old, left alone in the big Manehatten. She couldn't go to any friends, none of them would believe it was her. She then noticed her writing block and got an idea. She ran to the nearest book producer and showed them the story. The producer liked it and asked her name. She knew she couldn't go by the name Beauty Belle, so she quickly made up something when she looked around in the room. Hazy Rhyme. The producer was a nice old stallion and published it. She stayed by his house until she got money so she could live on a hotel.

Two years passed, and soon she didn't have enough money, the city was so loud so she had hard writing new stories. Her last book had been produced over 3 months ago, and she knew she wouldn't earn more money. She left with her half finished story to the producer for a last time. But the shop was closed and a mare walking by said that the stallion was too old to keep it up. Hazy was devastated. She had no where to go. No other pony would produce her book. She roamed down the street, had no hope left. She then met some ponies who were taking a trip to Manehatten. They went up to her and asked for directions. She didn't know what to answer, she had almost never talked to anypony except the producer the latest year. One of them saw her cutiemark and asked what her talent was. She answered and they got interested. They asked why she wasn't famous and she told them that books wasn't so big in Manehatten. Suddenly the unicorn in the group handed her a train ticket, saying that she should come with them back to Ponyville. She took the offer. She spent the evening on a train learning to know the nice ponies she met.

They arrived at Ponyville later and she found a cheap house she and the unicorn from the gang fixed up. She loved the calmness in the town and gave out the story that she got her cutie mark of. Many ponies bought it and begged her to write more. She was so filled with luck she could've cried. She now spends all her time to hang out with her friends and write.


Syringa Scent:
Name: Syringa Scent
Age: 3
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Filly
Eye Color and Accessories: Magenta and a white bow in her mane.
Main Color: Light blue.
Mane Color: Red/Orange
Weakness(es): Can sleep through anything, and is allergic to most kinds of flowers (except syringas).
Likes: Sleep, food and listening to Naura read her books.
Personality: Curious, sweet and happy.
Cutiemark: Blank flank.
Poison Joke effect: Not decided.
Pictures I got of her:
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Both made by Pony maker v3, and edited by me. I was to lazy to put eyelashes on the last one.

Made by Firefly.


Background Story:
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This unicorn filly was found when Naura and Bright Grace were playing hide and seek. Bright saw something behind the bush she was hiding in, and found the snoozing little filly. There was no sign of parents, so they gave her name and took her around Ponyville to see if somepony knew her. They named her Syringa Scent since she was found under a syringa bush. They stopped outside a little shop that had a white bow, Syringa seemed really like it, so they bought it to her. Nopony knew the little filly, so Bright convinced Naura that they should keep her with them.

Rapid Pulse:
Name: Rapid Pulse
Age: 16.
Race: Unicorn
Gender: Stallion
Eye Color and Accessories: Gingerbread and a rather teared apart scarf in the same color.
Main Color: Orange
Mane Color: Blue and yellow.
Weakness(es): Hates the cold, that's why he wears a scarf.
Likes: Exploring, chatting, getting surprised and helpful ponies
Personality: Mature, kind, brave, a little bit stubborn and always up to take chances.
Cutiemark: A torch with blue fire, his talent is adventuring.
Poison Joke effect: Instead of emitting light, his mane absorbs it and makes him temporarily blind when no light reaches his eyes.
Picture I got of him:
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Made by me.

Made by Ba2sai

Currently no backstory.


Here are images of my oc's together:
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Made by Reginald

Made by ChibiGrrl


The last twomade by me.
Feel free to check out my [URL=http://forum.legendsofequestria.com/index.php?topic=11982.0]Oc page[/URL]!

Tiger

If it's a critic you want, it's a critic you get.

Wait... Why is Naura's cutie mark on her neck? I wonder if that's possible...

I find her appearance a bit unoriginal since she's basically just a chikorita pony, but ey, I don't think there's really anything wrong with it if you're fine with it.

Did Naura just give herself the name Naura? She probably didn't understand a word when she was under the care of her family (unless babies learn to talk much earlier than i think), so she might not have known what her name was or something. Eh, debatable I guess.

Why did her family not care about her? I mean, technically speaking, all mothers would usually care for their child, even if they're disabled or physically handicapped or whatever. So what reason did her family have to not care about her? Also, any information on why they were passing by Everfree Forest?

So she was half a year old and left out in the Everfree Forest. Honestly, it seems rather stupendous to think she'd be able to survive like that. I mean, if we're following pony years and months, 6-month-old babies probably can't even walk or even feed themselves. Also, when you think about it, there are probably tons of poisonous fruits and things in Everfree Forest and Naura has no way to differentiate them from those that are safe to eat. She probably wasn't even able to think at that age - Baby ponies would stick anything they can get their hooves on into their mouths. It's simply impossible for her to survive in Everfree Forest without anyone or anything watching over her. An animal, perhaps.

I find it rather odd that she could learn the pony language simply by listening to other ponies communicating with it from afar. I wonder if that's possible... If it is then I'd have no objections.

Overall I find Naura's story rather un-believable, but I'm sure with a little tweaking it could be better. Maybe you could change the age she was left behind by her family so that it's understandable that she could survive on her own.

Anyway, on to the others... Although there's honestly not much to say about them since there aren't any background stories yet. I guess I'll talk about their appearance and colour scheme and stuff.

Whitney looks alright.

Hewan and Hawan may be twins, but it's odd that they essentially look exactly the same... I mean, the spa twins, Aloe and Lotus, in MLP look the same but have different colour schemes.



I would suggest doing that, but if you don't want to you could make one of their hairstyles a little different. I mean, if you look at most twins in real life you'd see they would wear different clothes or something, and I guess hairstyles are the clothes equivelent in Equestria or something.

It could be just me finding it weird though. You don't really need to do it if you don't want to.

So, Sabrina. She's basically a recoloured unicorn version of Fluttershy, isn't she?
I mean, there's nothing wrong with it, but it just gives off the feeling of being a bit unoriginal. Maybe there could be some changes.

And, Hazy Rhyme... She basically just looks like a filly version of Chrysalis. Again, it gives off the feeling of being a bit unoriginal. Just saying...


Anyway, I would have liked to see more background stories, but I guess it IS a work in progress. I hope you can improve on your OCs  ^-^

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Naura

2014 Jun 13, 01:48:59 #2 Last Edit: 2014 Dec 06, 04:24:52 by Naura
Cutiemark on neck cause I have don't want a leaf on her butt...
Well, I wanted Naura to have no parents, not having a like to them, not knowing her last name, and to live in everfree forest, so that was a quick way I came up with the idea, and when I decided they were passing Everfree forest, didn't I somewhere write that the parents was moving  o_O anyway, I thougth that if she was older than that age, she could have easily just been running back to the cart, I could change that she was older and just thought of it as a joke and that the family returned,  yeah, I'll change some of the ages and such.

Anyway, Aloe and Lotus are the only twins we have seen in Equestria, so its not sure that all the twins have the mane and main colors that way.

Sabrina, well, Fluttershy is not what I excpected, but I think I can see how you mean. No, she is more, umm, Maud? She doesn't show her entusiasm often, but of course she does,. She is more serious and like being polite about stuff and such, also, just cause I now she how bland people will think she is, (me reading through without thinking with my thougths of her personality, I find her a bit bland) I'll add one (or more) weakness to all my Oc's.

Hazy, well, I just love black colored ponys, I got no argument on her being unoriginal...

Thanks for the critic ^-^
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Tiger

Quote from: Naura on 2014 Jun 13, 01:48:59
Cutiemark on neck cause I have don't want a leaf on her butt...

You can't just put the cutie mark on her neck just because you feel like it... We haven't seen any pony in the show with their cutie mark anywhere other than their flank, right?
Then again, it's Equestria, I guess anything is possible ovO

Quote from: Naura on 2014 Jun 13, 01:48:59
didn't I somewhere write that the parents was moving  o_O

Whoops, I might have missed out that part  X3

Still, it doesn't explain why her parents didn't care for her, unless they were step-parents maybe.

Quote from: Naura on 2014 Jun 13, 01:48:59
anyway, Aloe and Lotus are the only twins we have seen in Equestria, so its not sure that all the twins have the mane and main colors that way.

True, I guess.

Quote from: Naura on 2014 Jun 13, 01:48:59
Sabrina, well, Fluttershy is not what I excpected, but I think I can see how you mean. No, she is more, umm, Maud? She doesn't show her entusiasm often, but of course she does,. She is more serious and like being polite about stuff and such, also, just cause I now she how bland people will think she is, (me reading through without thinking with my thougths of her personality, I find her a bit bland) I'll add one (or more) weakness to all my Oc's.

Actually, I was referring to her appearance, not her character.

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Naura

2014 Jun 13, 02:11:30 #4 Last Edit: 2014 Jun 15, 09:00:37 by Naura
Oh, hehe X3
Fixed the weakness(es)!
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firekirby135

Sorry, ain't got any critiques, but you may want to give credit where credit is due. Perhaps to the user who drew the OC in the first place? Not like he asked nicely in the description or anything. :P
http://doctor-g.deviantart.com/art/Chikorita-Pony-382556130
(not saying you meant to steal it or anything, just saying you may want to be a bit more careful about using other people's work without permission.  ;)
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Naura

2014 Jun 22, 13:30:02 #6 Last Edit: 2014 Jul 15, 08:00:14 by Naura
Added Bright Grace
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ThePolarAtlis

In all honesty I admire your originality for your OCs

GoldenTerrabyte

I think they all are great OCs! They just need a bit more fleshing out. But they all have potential! My personal favorite? Bright Grace.
I'm back

Tiger

Did you ask the creator of that grown up Diamond Tiara vector for permission to use it for your OC? And it would be good if you can give credit to him/her.

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Naura

2014 Jun 28, 02:58:44 #10 Last Edit: 2014 Dec 06, 04:27:35 by Naura
Quote from: Tiger on 2014 Jun 27, 19:56:13
Did you ask the creator of that grown up Diamond Tiara vector for permission to use it for your OC? And it would be good if you can give credit to him/her.

I won't use it, I just tried to get all colours to match and give a little reference what kinda long and rather curly could mean. But I'll add it.
EDIT: Added Syringa Scent!
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Naura

Added Hyper and Rapid Pulse.
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SparklestheUnicorn337

Well, they're certainly interesting. However, I find that some of your OCs' colour schemes are a bit dull, but then again, this is coming from the girl whose room has every colour imaginable. And of course, everyone has their own opinions, so listening to mine is only an option.  ^-^

Naura

Which color schemes do you mean exactly?
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SparklestheUnicorn337

The colour schemes of your ponies.

Naura

Yeah, but on which ponies?
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SparklestheUnicorn337

Oh, well, it doesn't really matter. The point is that you like them, so whatever I say is unimportant.  ^-^

Arctic Circuit

I need to get you some candy later...
Don't eat these they were teleported...

Naura

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Naura

2014 Nov 04, 03:44:54 #19 Last Edit: 2014 Dec 09, 04:02:12 by Naura
On a lot of other forums, I have gotten a lot of hate for using a chikorita pony, so I am removing the dots completly, I will with that edit some of the pictures I have of her, but the people who made them will still have the credit. If anyone of the artist have a problem wth this, I won't edit them or let them do it.

TL;DR Dots removed, pictures will be edited.
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