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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 Jun 03, 22:55:34

Grey looked at the clock on the wall of her office, there was but a mere thirty minutes till the trainees were expected to be there. If they came late on their first day, well, training would be made much harder much sooner. Guards, no matter which of the two sisters they served, were required to be up bright and early. There was no room for slackers in the Ranks of Luna..

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 Jun 03, 20:27:17

Grey was in the bowels of the castle, overnight the other trainers had arrived, and she was informing them of the trainees choices.

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Off-Topic / Re: Today's Smile

2015 Jun 02, 07:38:38

So, first the bad news, I lost my phone yesterday. Now the good news, I found it today, and got Paint.net and my pixel art has gotten waaay better.

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 May 31, 00:16:40

Grey smiled and shook her head "Other than a energized body and a mind that is willing to learn? No. Any books you'll need or other items will be provided by the service. Good to be diligent though." She appraised.

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 May 30, 19:28:46

Grey, surprised by the knock, went over to here door and opened it. Seeing Star, she smiled slightly "Ah, Star, how are you? Is there anything I can help with?" She asked, tilting her head curiously.

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Off-Topic / Re: Dumb things that annoy you

2015 May 29, 12:23:07

When someone just start randomly posting in an RP, even when the title has the words "Sign Up" in caps in it. Also when they make their posts like "*walks to house* *knocks on door*" that is a) Lacking extremely important details, and b) improper formatting for an RP post.. I could write 1000+ words on this subject, but I'm not going to because I want to enjoy my first day of summer break without raising my blood pressure too high..

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Off-Topic / Re: Today's Smile

2015 May 28, 22:07:04

I was at a local burger joint this afternoon and a middle-aged woman asked me what grade I'm in. When I told her I'm 23 years old she was shocked, saying I look like a teenager.

Do I really look that youthful? I sure feel like an old fart. Nice to know my outward image isn't aging as fast as my mental image of myself.

Ehehe
*is 15*
*looks 20-ish*
*acts 26-ish*
*mentally 25-ish*

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Off-Topic / Re: Dumb things that annoy you

2015 May 27, 12:02:35

I had to hide in a closet the other night because tornado sirens went off. So, yeah, we've had tornado warnings.

There was a tornado not even a mile from my house, I watched it blow by. That was four days ago..

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Pascalo Beach RP OOC

2015 May 26, 20:52:27

Also, only pony OCs. Is that okay?

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 May 26, 20:51:46

Grey chuckled at the wolf, and gave his belly a scratch. "You certainly are a large, fellow, aren't you." she smiled.

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 May 25, 16:44:00

Grey chuckled "That's all up to you, but honestly? Yes. If you apply yourself, you can do it."

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 May 25, 14:32:47

Grey nodded "Yes, go, enjoy the last day of your lives before training starts!" she said with a chuckle

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 May 25, 09:59:18

Grey smiled but shook her head "He's not mine, and he's not a dog. He's a wolf." she chuckled

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 May 24, 23:52:13

Grey smiled "Good, not all of the trainers are in yet, so for now, I would like it if you were to go about your day, and start reading the books. You will be called back her tomorrow at 0:800 hours. Clear?"

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 May 24, 12:20:20

Grey flipped her tail around a bit for the wolf, then reached over for several small booklets."These are the condensed versions of the Lunar Guidebook. Within them are rules for behavior around the princesses, information on the guards themselves, and other information that will be of much use to you as new recruits. I expect each of you to read over these, and memorize what it truly means to be a guard. This information will be pulled from in the tests, and failure to read these means failure to become a guard. Are we clear?" She asked with a raised eyebrow, as if daring them to question.

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Original Characters / Re: My OC for RPing Grey Scale

2015 May 24, 10:54:16

I was meaning to critique this OC for a while, but I kept pushing it off. Here it is anyway. Actually... this is more of a list of things I think should be improved upon.

I'd like to say this character has strong points, but you need to go more in depths on these points before I could consider them strong points. For example, her character would develop more if you could go into a little more detail about her magic and intelligence. I mean, for a pony who grew up in an orphanage with probably limited means of recieving an education, I'm questioning exactly how she became so smart? Was it from her parents that she just had a lot of natural talent? If so, it makes me wonder who her parents were, if they were so smart and yet they had to abbandon their child (under unknown circumstances). Did she just study in the orphanage a lot? If so, it would be helpful to point that out.

I'm not too thrilled about the concept of the pony version of the mob, especially after you describe them as cruel and violent. It sort of goes against everything MLP stands for. It's not a critical enough issue that I would say to revise that part of her story, but perhaps her involvement with the group should be revisited. She was raised by this mob because they saw potential in her to be profitable(?), but she turned them away when she was old enough to know better. Despite that, however, she allows her involvement with this mob to hang over her head. I suppose I could accept all that, though, since it is her choice, but one thing for sure I think needs a second look: this friend of hers. The one she let her secret be known to and whom revealed that secret the first chance he got. For somepony who is your "closest friend", I find that there needs to be a VERY good reason why he would hurt her like that, but such an explanation is not given. If there is a good explanation and you are simply withholding it for a later time, that's fine, but if event took place simply to move Grey Scale to Canterlot, I would express my difficulty in believing that this could occur in this context.

Her cutie mark also kind of raises some red flags for me. More specifically the fact that it represents her serving as a guard for Luna. It's true her talents seem to lie in being a guard, but not specifically Luna's guard. The fact that she got this cutie mark before becoming Luna's guard goes against how cutie marks are generally a reflection of a talent as the talent is being actively demonstrated. If she got this cutie mark AFTER becoming Luna's guard and realizing how satisfying the experience was, I wouldn't have a problem. The fact that she so happened to see a comet that appears every 100 years, which apparently forces the destiny of ponies who see it to "Luna's Guard", is difficult to believe. Of course, the way this story is structured, the only reason she made it into the guard was because the scouts noticed her cutie mark to be that of one destined to be in the guard. It's like the comet chose her destiny and not her. In light of this, I would highly recommend amending the circumstances behind the cutie mark and Grey Scales admittance into the Lunar Guard.

Thanks for the critique! I would like to point out that the comet did not place her as a Lunar Guard, merely pointed out that she would be in the service of Luna in some way. Her intelligence could be considered natural, and it was 'bloomed' by being in the mob.

I can understand your aversion to the 'mob' idea, but I consider Grey to exist in a somewhat darker AU of MLP.

In my eyes, the comet didn't choose her destiny, as it merely pointed out the fact that she would serve Luna in some way.

Her 'best freind's reason for ratting her out was complicated, but I put it down to him actually being loyal to the mob.

Her reason for abandonment I am keeping mysterious, it's never going to be explained. I designed her to have some flaws, and one of them, is never being able to let go of the fact she was abandoned. I want to keep that in her, a wound that will never heal.

Anyway, thanks for the critique, @Gracie Sky !

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 May 24, 00:43:35

Grey outright laughed at Pink's exuberance. "Hey now, take it easy, just because I am talented, does not mean that the trial will be easy. Nothing will be easy some things you will actually be able to do."

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 May 23, 23:48:54

Grey smiled "Even though you are not formally a guard yet, it would be best to get in the habit of calling me 'Captain Grey' or just 'Captain'. Even if we are friends, friends do count in the military. I should also inform you, I am the wild card." she said, smirking.

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Canterlot Archives / Re: Hail to the Moon (closed RP)

2015 May 23, 21:07:00

Grey chuckled at Pink's enthusiasm "You may choose which you wish to study under."

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Original Characters / Re: My OC for RPing Grey Scale

2015 May 23, 21:05:19

omg hi its been so long
Ah, she seems amazing! I'm working on my new main oc right now, Grey has an interesting backstory c:!

Thanks! It has been quite a while since I've seen you!