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How I love you.
Just felt I should mention that in case anyone was wondering why I was making them miss the first time and have a weak second attack .)
Quote from: Gracie Sky on 2013 Nov 05, 22:23:01
Well, first off, I'd like to get all the logical flaws out of the way.
I was wondering if there was a particularly good reason her parents named her Dark Grave. Unless both of them were also practitioners of dark magic, which didn't seem to be the case from what I read, an Equestrian family naming their daughter Dark Grave sounds a bit out of place. It sounds like a case of naming a pony after her special talent, which she didn't have when she was born, thus the flaw.
The maddened pony you mentioned should have a bit of foreshadowing or at least further explanation. He appeared out of nowhere for the sheer purpose of getting killed and then was never mentioned since then. I ask for an explanation because maddened ponies who demand all your belongings and then attack you because you have none I can't see existing, even as a plot device. Furthermore... not too sure a single blow from a broken tree branch would do a pony in. Of course, these all are just details; the whole point of this is just for Dark to see magic being used to kill another pony. I also happen to disagree with murder in Equestria, but that's just preference.
Now... necromancy... hmm. I'm not going to touch that subject, nor will I ask how and from where she was able to learn such arts for the purpose of being able to use magic without a horn.
As it turns out, though, most of this is covered in the uncensored version o3o "Skipping all the gorier details". That was my way of saying "more stuff happens but I have to not include it or LOE mods are going to chew me out angrily". The mad pony was actually meant to die from.... well, I can't say it here either
I had to be very careful with my characters Dark Grave, Loath Flash, and Crooked Path so as not to break rules. They have censored bios, so some things aren't included (such as exactly how Dark Grave came to existence. Her parents actually did use dark magic.... I have to leave it at that
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Quote from: Yellowpikmin476 on 2013 Nov 08, 17:12:03
Drew it myself.
10/10
Just looks awesome.
I know. For shame, I used a template. I may update it.
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I'm just worried she could be improved and I don't even see it. I won't take anything offensively, so don't hold back. I mean, from what I've seen you're more descriptive then "your OC sucks, and you suck
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