We decided to add our OCs over here. We have read some guides and are trying to make good OCs, so we would love some comments, good or bad.
Solar Storm
Gender: Mare
Age: 16
Species: Unicorn
Looks: Shimmering pale gold curls, muted yellow-gold coat, orange eyes it almost hurts to look at
Cutie Mark: A star like it appears in the sky
Talent: Magic, mostly concerning stars
Personality: Firey, short-tempered, tries to get the spotlight whenever she can, moderate OCD, very passionate about trying to get into Princess Celestia's Royal Academy for Gifted Unicorns, subject to peer pressure, is still finding out who she is and wants to be
Biography: Solar Storm is the oldest of three sisters, and the most easily agitated. She was greatly afraid of dark when she was young, seeing "monsters" even into her teen years. One day she was so frightened she created a small star that "scared the monsters away", earning her cutie mark. Solar also possessed a sort of jealousy of her youngest sister, who was an earth pony. Solar hated her fragile unicorn body and longed for something stronger. She started exercising often and, without realizing it, grew to love it more than anything else. All her unicorn friends were excellent at magic, and somewhat bullied her into more studying, forcing her to exercise less. She became moody at everypony, then decided to run away to Canterlot, where she applied for Princess Celestia's Royal Academy for Gifted Unicorns when she was fourteen. Celestia secretly watched Solar's test, and was impressed by her skills. She had a brief thought of making Solar her personal student, but Solar lacked what Twilight had, dedication and love for spells. The rejection hurt Solar, but she was determined to get in. Her studying matched Twilight's, and the want to be accepted urged her soul foreward. She takes the test every year, hoping to be accepted, but her dedication to her magic must rise before she can be accepted.
Notes: Solar is not as talented as Twilight in overall magic, but rather better in star-related magic. Solar also wrongly believes she must be obsessed with magic, although she love physical activities better.
We will post more when we have a chance, but we cannot at the moment. Once again, we appreciate any and all critique, as we wish to be better.
13 years and she's still not in? She's probably a bit old for a school designed to recognize prodigies amoungst Unicorns.
I think my main question is why doesn't she possess dedication and love for magic? Is something getting in the way? Is there something else she loves more than magic?
Quote from: Gracie Sky on 2012 Dec 11, 21:07:38
13 years and she's still not in? She's probably a bit old for a school designed to recognize prodigies amoungst Unicorns.
I think my main question is why doesn't she possess dedication and love for magic? Is something getting in the way? Is there something else she loves more than magic?
We do not remember a canon age limit, so we may change her age to fit.
She almost wishes to be an earth pony like her youngest sister, as she does not like the physically weak unicorn body. She tries to sneak in getting stronger, and, although she does not notice it, loves that better, however much she believes she loves magic. We are saying she thinks that because she possesses it, she
must be infatuated with spells, although she enjoys running and the like more.
Just to let you know, there is another "Princess Luna" here. I really like your OC tho!
I really like this OC :] I especially like her personality, though she does need a bit more expanding in her history. Nice OC though!
It's stuff like these that restore faith in me, ponies acting as canon ponies that have their own OCs, which makes me know that they DO have creativity ^-^
My 4 year old filly OC Miracle Dawn is about to try for Celestia's school. Maybe they can try together? :3
Quote from: ShadowHeart on 2012 Dec 11, 22:21:40
Just to let you know, there is another "Princess Luna" here. I really like your OC tho!
Thank you!
Quote from: Tiger on 2012 Dec 11, 22:46:08
I really like this OC :] I especially like her personality, though she does need a bit more expanding in her history. Nice OC though!
It's stuff like these that restore faith in me, ponies acting as canon ponies that have their own OCs, which makes me know that they DO have creativity ^-^
We worked hard to give her a complex personality so that she seemed more "real."
Quote from: Rad Thunder on 2012 Dec 11, 23:28:11
My 4 year old filly OC Miracle Dawn is about to try for Celestia's school. Maybe they can try together? :3
Perhaps they could, but it may take Solar a bit to get used to such a young filly.