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Title: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Feb 27, 22:54:15
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Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: Gingineer on 2014 Feb 28, 01:22:57
really like the colors on the pony too! chatbox wont let me post any more messages in a row  DD: D: D:
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: DextarClaw9 on 2014 Feb 28, 04:50:15
I also have mine like the one we chat'd :D
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: DawnsEmbrace on 2014 Feb 28, 13:29:50
Hm...
Hmm.....
Hmmmmm........

Nope, can't find any flaws.


I am curious about some things though.

Who's his favorite Princess,
how does he spend his time,
does he have a place of work?

Things like that mostly. 

[Edit]:  Also, I'd like to know where he got that stylish bracelet!
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: Ramisha on 2014 Feb 28, 14:14:36
That's cool. :) I like ponies who are actually their owners. My pony is me too :D
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Feb 28, 18:18:47
Updated a few things in my file now! ;)
Any other questions, comments, or critiques? feel free.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: DawnsEmbrace on 2014 Mar 01, 11:55:05
Quote from: MrEmu on 2014 Feb 27, 22:54:15
Name: *sips his tea* Ummm...still workin' on it.

Cutie Mark: Once again...still workin' on it...

Any other questions? feel free to ask!



Need any help with those?  You were there for Fantaisie, and I'd like to repay that any way I can.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Mar 01, 18:17:00
Quote from: DawnsEmbrace on 2014 Mar 01, 11:55:05
Quote from: MrEmu on 2014 Feb 27, 22:54:15
Name: *sips his tea* Ummm...still workin' on it.

Cutie Mark: Once again...still workin' on it...

Any other questions? feel free to ask!



Need any help with those?  You were there for Fantaisie, and I'd like to repay that any way I can.
Well my Cutiemark I gotta find myself ya know? and for a name I think I'm fine, but help's always great!
I'm looking for something that would sound good in the show though...
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: Gracie Sky on 2014 Mar 10, 21:49:33
It's really difficult to critique a ponysona. Saying something bad about a ponysona is indirectly saying something bad about the author, which I try to avoid at all costs. The only thing I could really comment on is he delivery, which yes... I suppose there are a few delivery problems in this. I guess I could also offer methods that would help give greater details on the character, which I have a few in mind.

The main issue is spelling and grammar. I realize you're writing freely and unfiltered, but I tend not to find the smilies and the comments in parenthesis appealing. The smilies and parenthesis aren't a big issue, since it's more of an issue in professionalism, but you should at least make sure all your words are spelled correctly.

From reading about this character... I have deduced he likes tea. I will let you know the third time you repeat it does not emphasize it any further unless it's part of a joke. Still, I would like to know more about this love of tea. Go into extensive detail about his experiences with tea. He's shy, but why is that? Why would a shy pony want to be a professional aerial performer like a Wonderbolt? I think you should focus on describing his most dominant features, rather than going down a checklist of everything you know about him.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: DawnsEmbrace on 2014 Mar 10, 22:01:41
INDIGO STEEP

-Eh-Hem-

Sorry, I didn't mean to shout.
I was just so excited to finally find a name I like.
Anyway, there you have it.

That was my best shot.


That took way too long...I'm losing my edge...

Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Mar 16, 06:43:57
Quote from: Gracie Sky on 2014 Mar 10, 21:49:33
It's really difficult to critique a ponysona. Saying something bad about a ponysona is indirectly saying something bad about the author, which I try to avoid at all costs.

lol I understand! But I can take stuff like that, if there's a problem with myself I'd want to know so I can change.

Quote from: Gracie Sky on 2014 Mar 10, 21:49:33
The main issue is spelling and grammar.

HAY! I spel gr8! lol JK
Yeah I do admit I AM an AWFUL speller and grammerer...I wish I could spell gooder...lol

Quote from: Gracie Sky on 2014 Mar 10, 21:49:33
From reading about this character... I have deduced he likes tea. I will let you know the third time you repeat it does not emphasize it any further unless it's part of a joke. Still, I would like to know more about this love of tea. Go into extensive detail about his experiences with tea.

Well, it is kinda a joke with all my friends...and I'm just annoying! But his love of tea? same reason as mine, I'll update it soon, just really late right now!

Quote from: Gracie Sky on 2014 Mar 10, 21:49:33
He's shy, but why is that? Why would a shy pony want to be a professional aerial performer like a Wonderbolt? I think you should focus on describing his most dominant features, rather than going down a checklist of everything you know about him.

Heh, well...that was actually put in there because I am deathly shy, but for some odd reason have a dream of...being...a [deleted]...(I'v only told ONE person that! sooo embarrassing! now everypony sees it...lol)

I have an idea why all this weirdness is here though, look to him bio later, I might have updated it then, I'll try to get around to it Tomorrow. Thanks for the evaluation! I really appreciate it!

P.S. @DawnsEmbrace Indigo steep? It's good but not what I'm looking for, But using "Steep" DID just open my mind to a HOLE new thing of names! I was just looking at types of tea names and "Oolong" sounds gross.
I may try something like "Steep" or "Brew" or something akin to it...

[Edit]: deleted my personal secret dream...heh heh...
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: Ramisha on 2014 Mar 16, 15:39:50
http://www.teausa.com/14656/glossary-of-terms
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: DawnsEmbrace on 2014 Mar 16, 16:18:57
Quote from: Ramisha on 2014 Mar 16, 15:39:50
http://www.teausa.com/14656/glossary-of-terms


[Chuckles]
Yup, that will do the trick.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Mar 17, 05:40:31
I REVAMPED THE WHOLE THING! lol Gracie was right about it being lacking so I started editing it and found it easier to star over... Please feel free to say what you like, dislike, and want to see more of!
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: Ramisha on 2014 Mar 17, 12:29:05
That's nice, but one thing bugs me. He's a kid, yet he stays inside and reads and drinks tea and all. I'm pretty sure kids love being outside and running and jumping and whatever it is that the little devil spawns do anyway.
Also, a new picture? Cool.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Mar 24, 00:21:01
Quote from: Ramisha on 2014 Mar 17, 12:29:05
That's nice, but one thing bugs me. He's a kid, yet he stays inside and reads and drinks tea and all. I'm pretty sure kids love being outside and running and jumping and whatever it is that the little devil spawns do anyway.


Well, Not sure it was a good thing but I loved to stay inside when I was his age, also I he does love to be outside a good amount, mainly at night time though, He/I just love to see the stars! :D
But yeah, I give him my flaws as well...lol
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: Ramisha on 2014 Mar 24, 06:29:59
Oh right, he's older than the cutie mark templars. At their age kids spend all their time outside and jump around... so annoying. Sorry, I forgot he was older.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: DawnsEmbrace on 2014 Apr 02, 17:03:34
Quote from: Ramisha on 2014 Mar 24, 06:29:59
Oh right, he's older than the cutie mark templars.


Cutie Mark...Templars?...
...No...
...Tell me they didn't get to the CMC!
Ram, why!?  What would the Templars want with three little fillies?!
They should be fighting the Templars, not joining them!

[Quiet Lamentations]
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: Ramisha on 2014 Apr 03, 08:04:23
Quote from: DawnsEmbrace on 2014 Apr 02, 17:03:34
Quote from: Ramisha on 2014 Mar 24, 06:29:59
Oh right, he's older than the cutie mark templars.


Cutie Mark...Templars?...
...No...
...Tell me they didn't get to the CMC!
Ram, why!?  What would the Templars want with three little fillies?!
They should be fighting the Templars, not joining them!

[Quiet Lamentations]

Uh well, they ARE called cutie mark CRUSADERS... so they might be working with the templars...  :/
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: GoldenTerrabyte on 2014 Apr 03, 15:19:25
What are templars?

Great OC by the way!
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: Ramisha on 2014 Apr 03, 15:32:08
Really? You don't know who the templars are?
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Knights_Templar
But in Assassin's Creed they're the bad guys.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: GoldenTerrabyte on 2014 Apr 03, 15:34:27
Right, but "Cutie Mark Templars"? What does that mean?
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: Ramisha on 2014 Apr 03, 16:05:21
WEll templars-a part of crusaders and in asassin's creed they're the bad guys and I hate kids and templars too so kids-templars ok GOTTA GO
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: That_Blue_pony on 2014 Apr 03, 20:36:05
ahem
um
ill just
leave
this here
mad hatter tea king emu
Spoiler: show
(http://th07.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2014/093/0/b/mad_hatter_tea_king_emu_by_sugarypinkskulls-d7cxl8m.png)
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Apr 03, 20:39:37
Quote from: That_Blue_pony on 2014 Apr 03, 20:36:05
ahem
um
ill just
leave
this here
mad hatter tea king emu
Spoiler: show
(http://th07.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2014/093/0/b/mad_hatter_tea_king_emu_by_sugarypinkskulls-d7cxl8m.png)

O: *gasp!* OhMiGoshOhMiGoshOhMiGoshOhMiGoshOhMiGOOOOSH! THANK YOU! :D
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: Ramisha on 2014 Apr 04, 01:04:57
that's like
epicness²
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: alexandas on 2014 Apr 07, 22:50:17
QuoteNow Gracie Sky asked a good question, "If he is shy why would he want to be a wonder bolt?"

I can answer this.  Because he wants to overcome his shyness and do awesome things.  Or, because you can be a brave awesome dude and also be shy, like, idk, you just can.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Apr 08, 18:22:39
Quote from: alexandas on 2014 Apr 07, 22:50:17
QuoteNow Gracie Sky asked a good question, "If he is shy why would he want to be a wonder bolt?"

I can answer this.  Because he wants to overcome his shyness and do awesome things.  Or, because you can be a brave awesome dude and also be shy, like, idk, you just can.
I can't confirm nor deny this because this is based off of me...
In real life I'm just like my ponysona, deathly shy and such, but I have similar dreams...Why do I want these if I'm so shy? I don't know.
If I had all the answers I'd become some great oracle of answers or something... X3
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be!
Post by: FanofRainbowDash on 2014 Jul 07, 10:25:40
Copy the code and paste it in the pony creator: mzxQ6VwAcr/+/y9lAwAAADAEgCwAACAzM7OfZmamn8RaBDH5W0RY
http://www.legendsofequestria.com/media
Spoiler: show
It's Sweet Brew.
(http://imageupper.com/s02/1/6/E140501930893258_1.png)
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Jul 10, 08:55:15
I'v revamped the whole thing, now it discribes Sweet Brew much better and some things are up to date!
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: DawnsEmbrace on 2014 Jul 10, 10:39:09
Ooh, this is much better.  Nice work, Emu.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: PlatinumJoystick on 2014 Jul 13, 06:43:14
Ah, but Dubstep is just one flavor of the theoretical buffet that is EDM.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Jul 13, 07:29:35
Quote from: PlatinumJoystick on 2014 Jul 13, 06:43:14
Ah, but Dubstep is just one flavor of the theoretical buffet that is EDM.
/me confused little foal o.O
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: PlatinumJoystick on 2014 Jul 14, 12:05:04
I've got a theoretical degree in physics.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Jul 14, 21:28:00
You're making no sense at all o.O
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: PlatinumJoystick on 2014 Jul 23, 12:30:43
I don't have a degree in theoretical physics, but I have a theoretical degree in physics.
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: PrincessButton on 2014 Jul 23, 17:12:21
Awe, a tea pony. How positively adorable.  ^-^ I almost made my pony's special talent tea related too~
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Jul 23, 18:46:16
Quote from: Princess Button on 2014 Jul 23, 17:12:21
Awe, a tea pony. How positively adorable.  ^-^ I almost made my pony's special talent tea related too~
Oh, Thank you! I adore tea as well, as you can see! lol
My favorite is Golden English blend black tea. ^-^
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: PrincessButton on 2014 Jul 23, 19:15:28
Quote from: MrEmu on 2014 Jul 23, 18:46:16
Quote from: Princess Button on 2014 Jul 23, 17:12:21
Awe, a tea pony. How positively adorable.  ^-^ I almost made my pony's special talent tea related too~
Oh, Thank you! I adore tea as well, as you can see! lol
My favorite is Golden English blend black tea. ^-^
I'm more partial to green teas myself, but that sounds mighty tasty. ^^
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Jul 23, 20:14:14
Quote from: Princess Button on 2014 Jul 23, 19:15:28
Quote from: MrEmu on 2014 Jul 23, 18:46:16
Quote from: Princess Button on 2014 Jul 23, 17:12:21
Awe, a tea pony. How positively adorable.  ^-^ I almost made my pony's special talent tea related too~
Oh, Thank you! I adore tea as well, as you can see! lol
My favorite is Golden English blend black tea. ^-^
I'm more partial to green teas myself, but that sounds mighty tasty. ^^
I always have 3 scoops of sugar with 15 drops of heavy whipping cream! (NOT whipped cream.....google it...heh)
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: PrincessButton on 2014 Jul 24, 14:11:52
Quote from: MrEmu on 2014 Jul 23, 20:14:14
Quote from: Princess Button on 2014 Jul 23, 19:15:28
Quote from: MrEmu on 2014 Jul 23, 18:46:16
Quote from: Princess Button on 2014 Jul 23, 17:12:21
Awe, a tea pony. How positively adorable.  ^-^ I almost made my pony's special talent tea related too~
Oh, Thank you! I adore tea as well, as you can see! lol
My favorite is Golden English blend black tea. ^-^
I'm more partial to green teas myself, but that sounds mighty tasty. ^^
I always have 3 scoops of sugar with 15 drops of heavy whipping cream! (NOT whipped cream.....google it...heh)
I'm familiar with the stuff.  ^-^
Title: Re: If I were a pony, this is who I'd be! [REVAMPED]
Post by: MrEmu on 2014 Jul 24, 14:33:11
Quote from: Princess Button on 2014 Jul 24, 14:11:52I'm familiar with the stuff.  ^-^
Thank goodness! you're, like, the FIRST pony ever to understand that! I always have to explain it and stuff! lol but yeah...it's pretty strong so you gotta only use a few drops. :3