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Roleplay Board => Original Characters => Topic started by: akirawind0 on 2012 Nov 28, 15:33:58

Title: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: akirawind0 on 2012 Nov 28, 15:33:58
Hey here my and only pony I made (I made a topic few minute ago it there was this so yeah)
I can believe how long it me to make this pony all most two moths in then end I got it look like it from the show
I most of the time use the computer

Here a picture a Crystal Shine work
Spoiler: show
(http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/333/9/f/crystal_shine_helping_somepony_by_akirawind0-d5mji8e.png)


Name:Crystal Shine
Age:20
Gender:Stallion
Type:Unicorn
Live's:Canterlot's Dress shop
Cutie Mark:Crytal Star
Work:Teacher & Dress Designer

Back Story:
Crystal Shine was top of he's class in magic school after that he when to Dress Designing and got sold few dresses.
He got A letter that he most visit ponyville and teach few unicorn ponies magic.
So know he travel between Canterlot and Ponyville to teach other ponies and Design dresses to ponies
He got he cutie mark when he help is classmate in magic by making a dress.

So This my OC I do not think there another pony name Crystal Shine I have few pony before but I it kind of fail on my part so seem like this is going to be my main pony
I will maybe make more ponies when I am ready make more
Title: Re: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: Rad Thunder on 2012 Nov 28, 16:01:52
That's a colt? Looks oddly feminine to me...
Title: Re: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Nov 28, 16:22:32
depends.... on who exactly is being described.  I could visualize the one on the right being a colt, a young one.  Still, the grammar and spelling here makes things just a bit difficult to understand.
Title: Re: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: Midnight Breeze on 2012 Nov 28, 16:34:45
Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Nov 28, 16:22:32
depends.... on who exactly is being described.  I could visualize the one on the right being a colt, a young one.  Still, the grammar and spelling here makes things just a bit difficult to understand.


He's Finnish so I'm guessing English is a second language for him.

Judging from their similar cutie marks I'm guessing these two are supposed to be fraternal twins. Or the same pony in two forms. Unclear.
Title: Re: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Nov 28, 16:53:43
maybe if somepony here understood Finnish they might help him out with it x3
Title: Re: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: Rad Thunder on 2012 Nov 28, 17:15:49
Oh, my net didn't load the other half of the pic. Oops.
Still looks girly though... :\
Title: Re: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: ShadowHeart on 2012 Nov 28, 18:01:12
maybe he made a typo because English is only his second language
even still, if a colt looks feminine, it isn't nice to make fun of someone based on gender or how they look  ^-^. They both look fine to me  ^-^
Title: Re: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: Rad Thunder on 2012 Nov 28, 18:02:54
I'm not making fun. I'm just stating it.
Title: Re: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: ShadowHeart on 2012 Nov 28, 18:56:15
i know that, but I just wanted u to recognize it  :]
Title: Re: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: akirawind0 on 2012 Nov 28, 19:44:48
Yes my second language is english I know I have so word that are a little mess up
I not good at english I better talking english than wrting yeah
sorry about that I am even use dictionary to help me on this.
(I speak all most everyday english)
Title: Re: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: Tiger on 2012 Nov 28, 20:19:46
So far, this is a nice OC! Still, there are things to be improved.

What relation does a magic star cutie mark have with dress designing?
It would be nice to add on a bit more on his backstory :)



What do you guys mean by "Looks feminine"? He looks fine to me.
Title: Re: Akirawaind0's OC (Crystal Shine)
Post by: akirawind0 on 2012 Nov 28, 20:53:11
Quote from: Tiger on 2012 Nov 28, 20:19:46
So far, this is a nice OC! Still, there are things to be improved.

What relation does a magic star cutie mark have with dress designing?
It would be nice to add on a bit more on his backstory :)



What do you guys mean by "Looks feminine"? He looks fine to me.


Now that Iook at the back story it actually need some more story well add that later some point