ShadowHeart's Ocs (UPDATED)

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2012 Nov 15, 15:53:57 Last Edit: 2012 Nov 20, 14:26:51 by ShadowHeart
(trytrytry again! Here we go again ppl!)
Criticism is welcomed. Also, add a nice compliment if you feel that your criticism is at the least bit harsh. Even if you're gritting your teeth and wanting to kill my ocs, write something nice anyway. sooooo here we go. I'll take a risk and post Shadow Shimmer first.

Name: Shadow Shimmer
Gender: Mare
Species: Pegasus
Cutie mark: A full moon with two purple clouds
Talent: A dark style of flying
Personality: Shadow is usually very friendly but can get hostile when she's jealous or the WonderBolts are mentioned. She's very dedicated to her flying and won't let her friends down.
Bio: When Shadow was a filly, she could barely move with her large wings. She had the size of adult pegasi wings when she was young and her parents believed she would be a disabled flier. However, they hired a physical therapist who helped her through strength training to lift her wings and at a young age, she was accepted to try out for the WonderBolts. The rules of the tryouts were simple, the pony with the highest score became the new captain and the pony with the second highest score would be second in command. Out of all of them, Shadow got the highest score by a few points but was ignored for her efforts. Instead, a filly and a colt: Spit Fire and Soarin were chosen and she was informed that she could never join because her style of flying just didn't fit. She would always leave behind a trail of purple shades and the judges told her that she couldn't be accepted for that. A few years later, Luna found her and asked her if she would be the first member and captain of the ShadowBolts. Shadow accepted and from then on, it was her life long dream to surpass the WonderBolt's popularity. After she became the captain of the ShadowBolts and had accepted one more member, she started dating Soarin'. It went on for a while but then they broke up, deciding that things weren't working out because they were on different flight teams.

Strengths: Sonic ShadowBoom, large wings, captain of the ShadowBolts

Weaknesses: She can't touch a singly small cloud without it becoming a storm cloud so she can't handle weather at all, Her wings can weigh her down when she is extremely fatigued, Shadow's wings will absorb liquid and will slowly weigh her down in a rainstorm

Pic:
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(Here is my earth pony character. I have two more but I haven't gotten around to them yet)
Name: Violet Light
Gender: Female
Species: Earth pony
Cutie Mark: Cherry blossom
Talent: Modeling for oriental settings (ill explain in the bio)
Personality: Violet Light is usually kind and friendly but at times is not sure how to act. She used to be poised and quiet but after she moved to Equestria, she started to get a little wild at times/ getting drunk with freedom.
Bio: Violet is from a small, overseas land, called Equus.(Basically Japan to us except for one thing!) In Equus, mares are expected to be obedient and poised. They don't have much freedom and are only expected to get married and be a good wife. Violet was part of the royal family in her country and she was requested to come to Equestria, where she would be a foreign advisory for Celestia and Luna. Whenever the two princesses need help with foreign affairs, she tells them what would favor her country the most. She has an estate in Canterlot that she(with her bratty new sense of freedom) demanded to be built in an oriental way for her. It's not a giant estate but a smallish one. Her main talent is complimenting settings that are from her country. When she left Equus, she no longer needed an escort to go outside or get married. She still is extremely shocked and grateful for the way of Equestria and she will sometimes go overboard with her freedom.
Strengths: Beauty, calmness
Weaknesses: Can't stand perilous adventures, letting freedom get to her head
By the way, I took the culture from Japan and mixed it with the limitations of women in Ancient China.
Appearance:
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Gracie Sky

So the Shadow Bolts actually exist and they weren't just an illusion created by Nightmare Moon in order to tempt Rainbow Dash into abandoning her friends? I'm a little worried for her, because she is driven by spite, from what I read. You also are implying double standards by the Wonder Bolts' Tryout judging committee. They would really disqualify a pony because their trail is not electrical smoke? I'm sure they would have pointed that out on a flyer or on the Rules or something. If that is the case, Rainbow Dash probably has no chance of joining, either, unless she figures out how to produce electric smoke in her wake.
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ShadowHeart

Sorry I didn't explain but Luna re-created the ShadowBolts as her own flight team like Celestia has the WonderBolts. Luna had the idea when she was Nightmare Moon but decided to actually create the group for a better good. And the point of the judges would just be the WonderBolts themselves I guess...and her trail was dark and they usually go for lighter and more vibrant flight trails such as lightning, smoke, and rainbows. thx for the input :)

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super_chris85

Very good back story. Are you thinking bout making her in a shadowbolt's uniform.

ShadowHeart

2012 Nov 18, 20:23:24 #4 Last Edit: 2012 Nov 20, 07:35:56 by ShadowHeart
im working on a pic of her and her other shadowbolt friends in a dog fight with the wonderbolts.
I have a pic of Shadow in her costume somewhere but i think it's on my laptop :P
EDIT: here it is!
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