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Original Characters / Re: Character Critique Thread

2014 Feb 10, 20:12:12

Whoops, looks like I made this response too long.
To avoid clutter, I put it in here.

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Yay!  I'm glad you liked (Most) of him. 
You found some problems I didn't think of, so mission accomplished on both ends!
I guess I should address some of those problems you've found first before going on.


In response to Powdered Joke and the Everfree.

He knows about, and what to do with, Poison Joke, due to witnessing it's effects during the episode Bridle Gossip.
He only keeps one vial on him at any given time, to minimize potential hazards and/or accidents.
Lunar has lots of patience, and that one vial is reserved for the few who can truly break through that.
Chances are, those ponies are jerks, major ones.
Let's take Diamond Tiara as an example.  Her defining trait is that she's a jerk.
If she contracted Poison Joke, it would most likely find some annoying way to NOT let her condescend others.
This experience would (In his opinion) benefit her greatly.  Whether this is a failing on Lunar's part or not, is up to the individual.

He doesn't consider it mean or extreme because of that belief, Lunar's a nice pony.  When dealing with something as delicate as this, he always knows of a remedy.
He places that remedy (In this case being a pouch of herbs and a note on what to do with them,) on the afflicteds doorstep the next night.

As for the Everfree, he walks there because he can be absolutely alone there, a state of being which he is most comfortable in.
He makes his best decisions when he's alone.
He's cautious yes, but not afraid of the forest due to his natural rationality, knowing he can at any time fly straight up to get out.

Don't forget, Lunar's from Canterlot.  He has most likely never heard of the dangers of the Everfree forest, and would be very interested in seeing this lost section of land for himself.
...And possibly mapping it...


As for Auto-biographies...I don't really know what to say.
You bring up all perfectly valid points, and I tend to agree with you.
I should probably just spruce up his regular boring bio.




Okay, this is a bonus bit of information just in case you wanted answers to those little questions, I didn't feel would have a good fit in his bio.

The reason he hasn't met any other pony with Starcharting interests is because I haven't in the forums yet.
As for not joining a club, there would be too many ponies there.  He'd never be comfortable.
Oooh, I could have him start his OWN club!  That way he can ease into meeting new ponies 1 by 1 while still finding ponies who care for what he does.

That was an unexpected idea.  Thanks Gracie!

His first name is Lunar because his family (On his fathers side) has all darker colors.  It's something of a tradition in his family to name children after that fact.
(His fathers name is Mond Komponist which is German for Moon Composer)




Okay.

Okay, okay, okay.


Star Music, is absolutely Celestia-darn BRILLIANT.  Sweet baby Princesses, it's brilliant.


I started doing some thinking on the idea, and have come up with something.
What if Princess Luna helped him write music by putting the stars in the sky a different way every night?
And every time he makes a "Starchart" he's actually writing music that our beloved younger Princess has given him.
Who is, in her own way, trying to teach him a lesson about not giving up on the hopes of your parents.

Oh, and yes, for the most part he sleeps during the day.

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The Retirement Home / Re: Make a new word starting with the last letter of the last word! (Reuploaded)

2014 Feb 10, 12:42:56

Hustle

3843

The Retirement Home / Re: Make a new word starting with the last letter of the last word! (Reuploaded)

2014 Feb 10, 11:47:51

Wonky


(If someone says that's not a word,)


What

3844

The Retirement Home / Re: Make a new word starting with the last letter of the last word! (Reuploaded)

2014 Feb 10, 11:16:28

Youngest

3845

The Retirement Home / Re: Make a new word starting with the last letter of the last word! (Reuploaded)

2014 Feb 10, 00:25:02

Never

3846

Original Characters / Re: An Introduction

2014 Feb 07, 15:32:58

I do have to wonder what exactly he did to earn his cutiemark.

"Legend has it, that on the longest day of the thousandth year, the stars will aid in her escape, and she will bring about nighttime eternal."


Can you guess which Charted stars got Lunar his Cutiemark now?

[Devilish Grin]   


PS: I like your new picture.

3847

Original Characters / Re: My alicorn OC

2014 Feb 07, 13:31:22

Putting Alicorn aside, I like everything else about him.

I like the idea that he uses ancient blades from a lost era of Equestria as weapons.
I like his personality, and his appearance doesn't seem to bug me as much as other people.

3848

Original Characters / Re: An Introduction

2014 Feb 06, 22:23:42

Wow, I wasn't expecting such a positive response!  Thanks so much, Lum!

3849

Original Characters / Re: Character Critique Thread

2014 Feb 06, 14:47:37

Wow, you seem to have a full time job with all these OCs, Gracie.

And you've been doing it for...
A YEAR and a HALF?
Wow.  Way to be dedicated to the job.


I kinda feel bad asking you about mine now...

Well, I guess I'll do it.
Please forgive me!


http://forum.legendsofequestria.com/index.php?topic=10393.0


Lunar Composer is over that way.


PS:  I know that the more in-depth auto-biography is long, so I tried my best to make a condensed version, but I'm still not quite happy with it.  If you have the time, and more importantly, the patience to read that whole thing, it would be much appreciated and will give you a better idea of who he is.

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Original Characters / Re: My alicorn OC

2014 Feb 06, 11:06:19

Dang, this looks a lot like my unpublished OC.
Time to make some changes to him I guess.

3851

Original Characters / Re: Shelly Shields, Ponyville Police Pony

2014 Feb 05, 15:46:55

I'd love to read it!
Though it will have to be later tonight or tomorrow, as I don't have a lot of time at the moment.

3852

Original Characters / Re: Shelly Shields, Ponyville Police Pony

2014 Feb 05, 14:35:34

I like her.

She seems just in-between too dark, and just dark enough, on what seems to be her own personal road to redemption.
Anyway, I enjoyed reading it.

[Series One:]

3853

Original Characters / An Introduction to my OCs

2014 Feb 05, 00:23:52

Series One:  The First Tries


Ponysona:

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Name:  Dawns Embrace

Earth Pony, Colt  (Male)
Friendly if he already knows you,
indifferent if he doesn't particularly enjoy your company.

Age:  17

Eye Color:  Deep, and I mean DEEP dark brown.

Mane Color:  Dark brown.

Coat Color:  The color of a stormy day's sky.

Cutie Mark:  The sun's rise, clearing right through the storm.

Talent:  He doesn't quite know yet, but he's getting there.

Personality: 
Quiet, somber, and largely unnoticeable.  If he's in a group, he's most likely to stick to the back.
Paranoia plays a part in all of his actions, as does consideration for the well-being of others.

His favorite things to do are,
Playing video games.
Listening to the conversations of people around him.
Grin, when people think he's not listening.
Vocaloid.  'Nuff said.
Watching a camp-fire burn.
Or candles.
Actually, watching fire in general.
Talking to friends about nothing in particular.

Oh!  And Anime.  Lots.  And lots.  Of Anime.


Life Long Aspiration:  Live life quietly, away from people who would normally cause problems.  Perhaps in a small cottage.  Or apartment.

The List:  Time for what I call, "The List".  You'll understand The List in just a moment.
Earth Pony,
Ravenclaw,
Dauntless,
Po-Koro,
Rogue,
Son of Hermes,
Thieves Guild,
Shadow-Clan,
SOS Brigade: Esper,
Garrison,  (I know I know, I'm a coward for not choosing Survey Corps)

Blissful Ignorance:

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Name:  Blissful Ignorance, (Nick:  Bliss)
"The Dawn Cometh,

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Unicorn, Colt.  (Male)
An homage to my earlier days of sailing the internet, Bliss is not unlikely to burst out in 010000100110100101101110011000010111001001111001 at a moments notice.
Once upon a time, he would have been my ponysona.  However, events have changed me into the person I am now.
He carries around a metal armlet engraved with "Vessel", and wears a mask shaped like a butterfly.
Only for Dusk to drown it.
Age:  15.
She Comes To Help,
Eye Color:  Grey.
He seeks to maim.
Mane Color:  Neon purple and bluish-grey, in a messy style.
She, Dawn, Promises Warmth And Sight,
Coat Color:  A mess of black and purple.
He, Dusk, promises safety in the dark.
Cutie Mark:  A spray-painted hourglass symbol.
Dawn Will Rise Against Him, Over And Over,
Magic Glow Color:  Neon purple.
But Dusk will kill her, over and over.
Talent:  He doesn't know.  A rough Hourglass shape isn't much to go on.
Dawn Hides The Moon, And It's Warriors.
Personality:  Quiet, reclusive, and overall unassuming.
Dusk ignores the moon, and it's warriors.
Favorite things,
Watch creepy YouTube videos.
Creep other people out.
Speak in binary.
Get sad.
Get more sad.
Talk to his metal armlet for no reason.
The moon will continue to wait, in peace.
Will often repeat lines from something.
Until it decides to shine brightest, in Dusk's dark."
Life-Long Aspiration:  To find the girl who abandoned him, the Butterfly of Rebirth.
I know you aren't there, but I wish you'd come back to me.  I miss you, Maya.[/spoiler]

Fantaisie Casquette:

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Name:  Whitewash Malady (Alias: Fantaisie Casquette)

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Unicorn, Colt.  (Male)
Prides himself on his extensive hat collection.
Makes a living selling (Cursed) hats to ponies who aren't in the know.
Makes a living baking cakes, at a local bakery.  (Family Recipe)

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Age:  24

Eye Color:  Deep green.

Mane Color:  Grey, with bright green highlights.

Coat Color:  A very pale, almost white, red.

Cutiemark:  A fancy Top-Hat with a faint skull imprint, skull flares with green light when exposed to said green light.

Magic Glow Color:  A sickly green.  He has to be careful how, when, and where he uses magic, as it will reveal the skull on his Cutiemark.

Talent:  Unabashed lies, trickery and malicious intent.  Though this time, aimed at enemies.

Personality:  Not quite as charming as he used to be, White actively tries to be a better pony for his friends.  Refraining from his normal behavior for their sake.

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Outwardly fancy and charming, he has a tendency toward theatrics and grand design. 
Inside though, he wishes for nothing more than to ruin your day theatrically with one of his fantastical hats.

His favorite things to do are,
Spend time with his Special Somepony,
Try not to laugh while watching you trip into mud.


Life-Long Aspiration:  To make reparations for his mistakes, and become a trust-worthy stallion.

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To create a disaster so Epic, so Magnificent, its effects will be felt throughout all of Equestria.

This Character was created with the help of a few close acquaintances and friends, without their help Fantaisie would be nothing like he is today.

A super duper GIANT thank you to Ramisha for drawing the amazing picture up there.

And another thank you, for helping make Fantaisie to:
LarryMcLie,
StalePhreak,
Gingineer,
(And a small part) MrEmu.

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Lunar Composer:

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Here is an Out-of-Character biography of Lunar Composer.
You know, if you want to be boring about it.


Name: Lunar Composer.



Pegasus, Colt.  (Male)
He has a bad hind hoof, though it's not necessarily a problem, due to having wings.
Has a small interest in alchemy, though all he can really do is crush up Poison Joke flowers to make Powdered Joke vials.

Age: 16 (Play what you know, and all that)

Eye Color: Grey-Blue mix.

Mane Color: Black, with a small moon-silver streak.

Tail Color: Moon-silver, with a small amount of black approaching from the edges.

Coat Color: A dark-blue coat, which tapers off into black at the knees.

Cutiemark: A crescent moon with a star on its north, south, east, and west.

Talent: Starcharting, with a general knowledge and love of mapping in general.  (He's just not as good at mapping, rather than Starcharting)

Personality:
Lunar has patience in all things, save for a few topics.
He'll help you out with almost anything, so long as he genuinely thinks you need it.
He's shy, but not like a certain other pegasus we all know, he just lacks the motivation to interact.

His favorite things to do are,
Stargazing,
Reading, (Usually by candlelight)
Taking walks through Ponyville or the Everfree.  (Preferably at night)

Life-long Aspiration: Fully mapping out the Everfree forest, and nights sky.  (An impossible task, but he has the patience for it)


That about covers it.
However, if you still want to read my first, In-Character Auto-Biography, you can due so, by clicking that treasure box down there.
If you don't want to though, I guess that's okay... 
I did put quite a bit of work into it though, so if you want to read it, I welcome the comments or criticisms you can throw at me.



[spoiler]Is uh, is this on?  I should hope so, I've been trying to figure out this computer since Thursday.
Anyway, my name would be Lunar Lens, if my parents had not been overcome by a bout of insanity when naming me.  My actual name is Lunar Composer, they assumed I'd be in the family business, music, that is.  They couldn't have been farther from the truth.
I've considered changing it, but it is what my parents named me, and I don't want to make them think I'm ungrateful.

Well, I suppose I should tell you about myself first.
I am a Pegasus Colt formerly from Canterlot.
Though I'll get to my history some other time, so as not to bore you.


I'll start at my faults.

My saintly patience reaches everywhere except for three topics.
Unless you are a close friend, I don't care how curious you are, do not ask me about my bad hind hoof.  I'll get back to that later however.
I don't like ponies pointing out the fact that my name does not have to do with my talent.  I've heard it enough times from everypony else, and I don't need to hear it from you.  Again, I'll get back to the topic of my talent later.
Lastly, and this I cannot abide even if you are Celestia herself.  DO NOT point out how feminine my tail is or SO HELP ME I'LL RI-[Static]
...
...
[Static Clears]

[Clears Throat] Anyway.  Back to my faults.

Ponies say I'm not social, and I incline to agree with them that I don't search out companionship.  It is not from a lack of caring, but rather a lack of social skills.  Around even the politest and most amiable ponies I tend to seize up, and my first instinct is to run away.  This behavior has plagued me since a certain childhood event, though I do consider myself a good listener, if I happen to enjoy your company.
If you get on my bad side, however, expect not to see me.  Ever.  If you do happen to find me, I would suggest running, I'm known to throw one of my many harmful vials of Poison Joke, or Powdered Joke as I like to call it, at ponies who don't know when to quit.

I have yet to meet a pony in Ponyville who shares my interest in stargazing.  Though, now that I think about it, that's probably because I don't talk to very many ponies.

Well that about covers my faults.  At least, the ones I'm aware of...


Continuing the topic of my Special Talent, it is Starcharting.

I learned from an early age that I could easily spot, and remember, changes in the placement of the stars.
My near obsession with Stargazing was considered by my Father to be a distraction from my lessons on composing musical scores.  He said I wasn't focusing on learning, and just daydreamed about the night sky.  Those lessons were dreadfully boring and tedious...I hated them.
My only respite from that was my love of the sky.  I didn't know that would soon be taken from me.
My father took my telescope.  He thought he was being clever, hiding it in the rafters of the attic, but I was no fool.  He raised me better than that.
Every night I would get up at 3:00 AM, fly up to the rafters to steal back my telescope, stargaze to my hearts content, then put the telescope back at roughly 6:00 AM.  This was my life for 3 months.
Thinking back, I wonder if either Mother or Father knew how much it meant to me.

Eventually, my father found the Starcharts and observances I had been writing every night.
He surprised me that day.
He told me he was impressed by them, and that he was going to give me my telescope back.

I love that old colt...


They questioned my decision to go into the art of starcharting, almost as much as my decision to move to Ponyville.
That is to say,
they threatened to take away my inheritance.  At first.

Oh they didn't actually do it of course, they are good parents after all, they just had their expectations.
I simply had to prove to them that I could do it, and that I was going to do it.
They didn't put up much more resistance when they woke up to me sporting a brand new Cutiemark.

I moved to Ponyville and began making new Starcharts to donate to the library in town.
I have a pretty good setup, I keep an eye on the heavens for the town, and I get a modest sum of bits from the mayor at the end of every month.


I can't believe I just went rambling about my history after stating I wasn't going to do that...[Sigh]...
I apologize,
I haven't even given you a description of myself yet.
Again, I deeply apologize.

I have a dark blue coat that I'm rather proud of, which darkens into black above my hooves.  As for my hair, black mane with a moon colored streak, and a moon colored tail, with black encroaching on the edges.
My cutiemark is of course, a drawing of the night sky.
And lastly, my eyes are a grey-blue mesh of colors.


Maybe I should talk about my interests other than stargazing...
I enjoy taking walks through the Everfree from time to time, usually when I need time to think.  Not deep into it or anything, always on the path, or always in sight of the treeline.
That is also when I collect a fresh batch of Poison Joke for my improvised...Self-defenses.
It's either the Everfree, or just a stroll through town which is equally beautiful.  The night really brings out the best in Equestria...

I enjoy reading by candlelight, though I prefer to read by moonlight, if it's bright enough.


Alright, I loathe talking about it, but I suppose you have been patient enough to go through all of this just to get to the end, so I might as well reward you.

I was born with a withered hind hoof.
It isn't an impairment, not really.  I have three healthy hooves, and a pair of wings for balance.
I was judged as needing help from the moment I was old enough to walk, even though I don't need it.
I hated being singled out, almost as much as I hated my music lessons.
This led to an unfortunate incident at the Canterlot Summer Sun Celebration when I was seven or so.
I can't remember the exact year, but I was young and foolish in this regard.
I witnessed our Princess raise the sun, and was immediately certain that she could 'fix' me.
I ran up to her, and begged her to fix my leg.  In front of the entirety of Canterlot no less.
She calmly explained to me that she could not.  There was nothing to fix, my leg was not heal-able because there was no previous state of healthiness.
I vaguely remember her trying to talk to me about how I shouldn't let something like this affect my opinion of myself, but I wasn't listening.
All I heard at that moment was that my only hope, our great Princess of the Sun, the ruler I had been raised to view as perfect and beautiful in every way, could not, or more accurately to me at the time, would not help me.

I was distraught.
I suddenly realized that I was about to break down into tears in front of everypony in the amphitheater.
Unfortunately that only served to break me quicker.  My parents herded my out of there with all the speed they could muster.

This public humiliation served as a factor in my decision to move to Ponyville.  Nopony knew me there, and I don't plan on letting them know me.
That was especially difficult when some pink...[Shudder]...Horror...Decided to throw me a party.


But I think that covers everything.
I'll be going soon, I have more charts to make and revise.
I would wish you a good day, but it's not daytime, is it?...

Eh.  I know he's pretty un-original, but I like him.

A big ol' "Thank you" to Greyscaleisme for the picture.

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Rhyme Scheme:

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Name:  Rhyme Scheme

Changeling, Colt  (Male)


Age:  26

Eye Color:  Pale gold.

Mane/Wings Color:  Dark yellow with pale gold threads.

Coat Color:  Changeling grey.

Cutie Mark:  Changelings...Don't get to have Cutie Marks.

Talent:  While he has no defined talent drawn on his flank, he loves to write.  Poetry in particular.

Personality:
He's cheerful and friendly, though it's mostly an act.  He dreams of being a traveling bard, but knows it won't make him happy.
Once he gets a poem idea, few things can stop him from writing it down immediately.
Every now and then, a diabolical thought or two form in his mind.

His favorite things to do are as follows,
Write poetry by moonlight or candle-fire.
Having talks with his peers, about nothing in particular.
Having his poetry critiqued.

Life Long Aspiration:  To become so skilled at poetry that he can come up with the rhymes on the spot.

Hearth:

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Name: Hearth

Age: 27

Personality:
Warm to friends and scalding to foes, Hearth takes to the skies with Lance in claw.

Appearance:
With deep blue-purple scales, Hearth blends into the nights sky very well.
His small bit of mane is green, with a grey streak.  He likes to drum the streak up as stress from the job.
His eyes are a grey, much like the streak in his hair.

3854

Original Characters / Re: Pony-ality Test for OCs!

2014 Feb 04, 21:31:57

I actually forgot to mention, I was forced to answer D on the first Charisma question due to personal reasons in the characters past.
Because of those reasons, he never attends the Summer Sun Celebration.
(Had he not had those reasons, my answer would have been B )
Eh.
I thought it was worth mentioning.

3855

Original Characters / Re: Pony-ality Test for OCs!

2014 Feb 03, 17:58:14

That's pretty on point, all except Charisma I think.
Lunar would help (Just about) anyone he thinks needs it, but he'd do it awkwardly.

All in all, I like his results.
Thanks for the test, Asterian.

[Post Merge]

3856

Original Characters / Re: Pony-ality Test for OCs!

2014 Feb 02, 21:41:30

I hope it's still open, I haven't done it yet and I really want to. 
Post Merge
Here are my results.

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Patience:
1. B
2. D
3. A

Conformity:
1. C
2. B
3. B

Compassion:
1. B
2. A
3. D

Charisma:
1. D
2. D
3. B

Intellect:
1. B
2. A
3. B

I really hope Lunar Composer isn't a jerk I just never knew it.

PS: What do you think of the name Lunar Composer?
I thought it was pretty good, but his talent doesn't have anything to do with music.     
Maybe I should find a way to work it somehow...

[Edit]  Heheh, I just realized his Compassion results spell, BAD.
I sincerely hope that's a coincidence.