Rate my OCs

[Kai Serpentine]

Here are my two ponies:

#1 ((Shes a WIP))

Name: Moonlit Incandescence
Race: Snake pony/Unicorn
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Description/Picture: black coat/scales has mother-of-pearl gemstone scales in spot shapes w/ rose-gold eyes and silver straightish spiky hair
Personality: Moonlit is usually too high to care about anything, but when she isn't on something, she is suspicious, formidable, and armed with a short temper; occasionally she is kind and loving. What makes her so isuspicious of everything is an accident that happened(REDACTED). She has created a virtual 'shield' around herself, blocking everypony except loved ones or ponies she gives her friendship to. Her kind side, on the other hoof, is unformidable and soft, but very few ponies earn her trust.
Cutie Mark: A potion flask with a snake pony tail wrapped around it (origanally a gem w/  snake pony tail wrapped around it)
Occupation: Potion making and occasionally selling
Special Talent: What do you think?  (potion making )
Allegiance(Does she side with Luna or Celestia?): Luna
Flaws:Redacted)), being too sarcastic sometimes, falls in love too easily, short temper, avoids other ponies to an intense level at times.

#2; Completed
Name: Icy "Schnee" Inferno
Age: 17
Race: Bat pony
Gender: Female
Cutie Mark: blue flames
Talent: Season based: Helps bring in winter (if it doesnt seem relevant, dont bother. Ive seen ponies with plant cutie marks who are inventors)
Occupation: Head of the weather team in Caneighda
Description: Dark gray and white splotched w/ blue eyes and a little taller than average
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