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Quote from: Azure Dusk on 2012 May 22, 16:53:15Quote from: Moonlight Paradise on 2012 May 22, 16:32:56
I don't care what you say about mah pony, you already talked about that kind of thing with Dragnmastralex and I don't roleplay much either. Even when I do, it is usually with a different OC.
Banana is just offering feedback to ponies that ask for it, he's not trying to offend.
Quote from: Lusterless Nova on 2012 May 21, 04:29:30
I usually don't want critism but this is the first time i have ever created a character like this. If you have some free time click the link in my signature and be honest about what you think about Lusterless Nova. By the way his family will later have a small introduction.
Quote from: Pinkie Pie on 2012 May 20, 02:20:16
I'd love some constructive criticism on my OC. The link is in my signature, I'd love it if you could give me some feedback on Moonbeam. ((I'd ask you to do Breezy Wind as well but she's not complete yet, I haven't developed her personality and bio and such.)) Please and thank you.
Quote from: Azure Dusk on 2012 May 19, 23:51:10
Oops! Sorry, didn't see that.Quote from: bananamustang on 2012 May 19, 11:33:41
Great work!
The use of the rank and unit names is really good my issue is that he is a petty officer 2nd class and in the REAG. Petty officer is a rank for the navy and coast guard. Look into the air force to get the proper rank. I tend to use a touch of realism when I RP with my military character because I know how it works and want to keep it as believable as possible.
Thanks for the feedback. The reason I made him a PO2 despite being in the Air Guard, was because I was a PO2 in the USNSCC, so I wanted to try and keep that as a sorta homage to that time in my life. That, and I'm really not that good at coming up with rank names. I'll try to come up with some at another time.
Quote from: Azure Dusk on 2012 May 19, 12:28:57
Bananamustang, could you please give me some feedback on my OC? Thank you
http://forum.legendsofequestria.com/index.php?topic=1546.0
Quote from: Dragnmastralex on 2012 May 19, 12:12:30
let's face it when it comes to Role Play most things won't fit unless you play already cannon characters and there are a lot of boundaries you can not cross even if you make it all original ponies because of the limits someone has are always higher than anyone's imagination will allow... consider if you went back in time and tried to role play out say... the wedding finale back when season 2 started they would say it wasn't allowed and wouldn't fit in the MLP world... yet it was an episode made but the limits would have said "Celestia doesn't have a niece, Twilight doesn't have a brother, and there is no such creature as a changing that can take anyone's form. So you can't do that stuff." That's why I don't role play I just made my pony as my OC character to represent me I add a story that I think would fit the MLP universe and I don't care what others think about it because its NOT a crossover and I don't go into ridiculous situations that couldn't fit into the MLP world.
Quote from: Azure Dusk on 2012 May 17, 12:33:34
Can you take a look at mine?
http://forum.legendsofequestria.com/index.php?topic=1546.msg91728#msg91728
Quote from: Trege on 2012 May 18, 15:44:37Quote from: bananamustang on 2012 May 18, 12:32:18
I just thought of something when you said scrolls: you know how a music box works? With the nubs that hit the metal sticks (I don't know nomenclature).
Yeah kind of after reading this. http://www.musicboxattic.com/leabmubo.html
Just from the criticism alone I've got an intro story planned already and more of Cobalts past figured out and possible events for Spring Melody
I think I can finish Cobalt now and get Spring's story and background set up and pick an instrument for her.
(I'll probably post a fanfiction on the forums eventually when I get the time to write it.)
Quote from: Trege on 2012 May 17, 17:47:17
First, thanks for the criticism bananamustang it really helps a lot most places I posted fancharacters in didn't provide much critiscm so I couldn't figure out what needs to be improved on I did lack a few things in his description which I couldn't think of at the time, anyways after reading a long thought out guide a few months ago about how to avoid mary sue/stu syndrome I've been trying to make sure the characters I'm working on have noticeable
flaws, Cobalts being that he sometimes gets angry when people pry into his past because of what happened to his parents which I haven't thought of an event for yet as I'm worried if a tragic past can fit into the MLP universe without having problems the reason he eats at ponyville cafe is while he does live in the forest hes only slightly antisocial and visits the town now and then when he needs supplies and or normal food, considering I don't think theres any food in everfree aside from zap apples which only bloom once a year, I also forgot to note that he was born in everfree forest because thats where his parents lived, and hes still in the same house even after the event that happened to them.
I'll probably work on his special talent some and just make one of his minor skills repairing armor but he can only repair it and I'll probably make his special talent something else though it comes in question if I have to get a different cutie mark for him since that relates to their talent.
I also wasn't sure where I was going with Spring Melody yet I still haven't decided what instrument she uses and I'm thinking of making her magic music come from enchanted music scrolls that she either enchants herself or gets them from various ponies who don't know how to use them. (Mainly Pagasus or Earth Ponies who can't use in depth magic to begin with.)
Quote from: Trege on 2012 May 16, 19:25:21
I have one OC I've been wanting to get some criticism on, I think I made his profile a bit too corny or underdeveloped, tends to happen a lot when I make fan characters.
http://forum.legendsofequestria.com/index.php?topic=1776.msg104389#msg104389
(Will likely be used in roleplays and fanfiction if I get them developed enough.)
Quote from: Dragnmastralex on 2012 May 16, 08:50:34
I already have my OC pony Starry Night.
I have his full profile here...
http://forum.legendsofequestria.com/index.php?topic=278.msg4339#msg4339
it's as detailed as I could make him without actually writing a full fanfic on him.