[Herd] Travellers Blessing.

Started by Travius Trott, 2012 Apr 27, 06:11:48

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I'm curious, so, how many of the different races are in this herd.

Unicorn
39 (31.5%)
Pegasus
53 (42.7%)
Earthpony.
25 (20.2%)
Not decided yet.
7 (5.6%)

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Travius Trott

Well, strictly speaking it's not a rank, but more of a role, and as of yet I have no system to keep track of it, so just chose whatever one you want and use the banner for that.
If you can not decide then there is always the 'associate'.

Oh, it would appear that I got some fancy title, Notable pony, now that's something that I had not expected to gain.
Thanks everypony, for this most brilliant thing.

Trilight Dashie

2012 Jun 15, 06:38:41 #321 Last Edit: 2012 Jun 15, 07:44:57 by Trilight Dashie
Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Jun 14, 17:36:17
Dunno if ponies here like it or not, but made a little song for you all.  Not much, work in progress x3

Far over the Canterlot Mountains tall,
To Luna's keep, Celestia's hall.
Timberwolves howl in the dark;
The dragons come to leave their mark.
The clouds turn pink,
Our spirits sink,
Equestria fell to Discord's might,
But we returned, him for to smite!

Once again we climb the mountains tall,
In triumph over Discord's fall!
Our friendships held, our honesty stood strong.
Our kindness grew; our laughter in song
A generous gift
Friends to uplift.
The Traveller's Blessing, loyal knights,
We stand for everypony's rights!


After I played Misty Mountains, and was looking at the lyrics you wrote, all I had in mind was:
"......ponyfied......"
lol lol lol
But to be honest, lyrics fits really good(I don't mean the music).
In addition, all I had to do with singing, were a couple of rap songs and few romantic songs. But, from what you said Magus, I guess we can make a choir  ^-^ If Sonic really wants to sing, that is =P There's nothing to be embarrassed about one's voice. Also, there's nothing hard to lower your voice that deep and sing long notes  :D

In addition:
Line "Timberwolves howl in the dark" and especially first two words are a lil' bit weird to sing because of syllables =P

Why do chemists call helium, curium, and barium 'the medical elements'? Because, if you can't 'helium' or 'curium', you 'BARIUM'! Heheh."

Ezio Auditore da Firenze

Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Jun 14, 17:36:17
Dunno if ponies here like it or not, but made a little song for you all.  Not much, work in progress x3

Far over the Canterlot Mountains tall,
To Luna's keep, Celestia's hall.
Timberwolves howl in the dark;
The dragons come to leave their mark.
The clouds turn pink,
Our spirits sink,
Equestria fell to Discord's might,
But we returned, him for to smite!

Once again we climb the mountains tall,
In triumph over Discord's fall!
Our friendships held, our honesty stood strong.
Our kindness grew; our laughter in song
A generous gift
Friends to uplift.
The Traveller's Blessing, loyal knights,
We stand for everypony's rights!



Very, very good. I would give you the prestigious 5 mustaches award, but you'll have to take Scootaloo instead.  0:) 0:) 0:) 0:) 0:)
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The Wandering Magus

Quote from: Sotha on 2012 Jun 15, 02:23:06
Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Jun 15, 01:11:35I guess we'll find out when the game starts, eh? :] By the way, suggestions/constructive criticism on poem/song? Thinking of adding verses, but kinda need ideas too.

I can't comment on the tune, as I have yet to listen to the Hobbit trailer and sing it out, but I can comment on a couple things.

The last line seems a little weak. We stand for everypony's rights? That's a bit generic. 'T'would be better if tailored more to what Traveler's Blessing's mission statement purportedly is. I imagine you're roughly following the story outlined in the title post?

You could probably add one to two verses in the middle to better flesh out the founding of the group, and what it actually did post-Discord. And then your second verse can act as a transition to a final verse (which would make five total, by how I'm drawing it out, which seems like a pretty good amount) set in present day to describe what Traveler's Blessing stands for today. Of course that all is only if you're trying to engage Valentine's background story in song.
And with such length, I'd also have to suggest melodic variation in perhaps the third and fourth verses, with a return to the theme at the end. Or whatever. You know what I mean.
I'll try that! thanks for the tip ^-^  now I have some writing to do!

Quote from: Trilight Dashie on 2012 Jun 15, 06:38:41
Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Jun 14, 17:36:17
Dunno if ponies here like it or not, but made a little song for you all.  Not much, work in progress x3

Far over the Canterlot Mountains tall,
To Luna's keep, Celestia's hall.
Timberwolves howl in the dark;
The dragons come to leave their mark.
The clouds turn pink,
Our spirits sink,
Equestria fell to Discord's might,
But we returned, him for to smite!

Once again we climb the mountains tall,
In triumph over Discord's fall!
Our friendships held, our honesty stood strong.
Our kindness grew; our laughter in song
A generous gift
Friends to uplift.
The Traveller's Blessing, loyal knights,
We stand for everypony's rights!


After I played Misty Mountains, and was looking at the lyrics you wrote, all I had in mind was:
"......ponyfied......"
lol lol lol
But to be honest, lyrics fits really good(I don't mean the music).
In addition, all I had to do with singing, were a couple of rap songs and few romantic songs. But, from what you said Magus, I guess we can make a choir  ^-^ If Sonic really wants to sing, that is =P There's nothing to be embarrassed about one's voice. Also, there's nothing hard to lower your voice that deep and sing long notes  :D

In addition:
Line "Timberwolves howl in the dark" and especially first two words are a lil' bit weird to sing because of syllables =P
I was thinking of maybe changing the first four notes of that line to "F-E-D-G" rather than "D-D-F-G", as you said, to make the syllables work.  What do you think?

Quote from: Ezio Auditore da Firenze on 2012 Jun 15, 10:37:20
Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Jun 14, 17:36:17
Dunno if ponies here like it or not, but made a little song for you all.  Not much, work in progress x3

Far over the Canterlot Mountains tall,
To Luna's keep, Celestia's hall.
Timberwolves howl in the dark;
The dragons come to leave their mark.
The clouds turn pink,
Our spirits sink,
Equestria fell to Discord's might,
But we returned, him for to smite!

Once again we climb the mountains tall,
In triumph over Discord's fall!
Our friendships held, our honesty stood strong.
Our kindness grew; our laughter in song
A generous gift
Friends to uplift.
The Traveller's Blessing, loyal knights,
We stand for everypony's rights!



Very, very good. I would give you the prestigious 5 mustaches award, but you'll have to take Scootaloo instead.  0:) 0:) 0:) 0:) 0:)
yay~ x3
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Trilight Dashie

Quote from: Trilight Dashie on 2012 Jun 15, 06:38:41
Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Jun 14, 17:36:17
Dunno if ponies here like it or not, but made a little song for you all.  Not much, work in progress x3

Far over the Canterlot Mountains tall,
To Luna's keep, Celestia's hall.
Timberwolves howl in the dark;
The dragons come to leave their mark.
The clouds turn pink,
Our spirits sink,
Equestria fell to Discord's might,
But we returned, him for to smite!

Once again we climb the mountains tall,
In triumph over Discord's fall!
Our friendships held, our honesty stood strong.
Our kindness grew; our laughter in song
A generous gift
Friends to uplift.
The Traveller's Blessing, loyal knights,
We stand for everypony's rights!


After I played Misty Mountains, and was looking at the lyrics you wrote, all I had in mind was:
"......ponyfied......"
lol lol lol
But to be honest, lyrics fits really good(I don't mean the music).
In addition, all I had to do with singing, were a couple of rap songs and few romantic songs. But, from what you said Magus, I guess we can make a choir  ^-^ If Sonic really wants to sing, that is =P There's nothing to be embarrassed about one's voice. Also, there's nothing hard to lower your voice that deep and sing long notes  :D

In addition:
Line "Timberwolves howl in the dark" and especially first two words are a lil' bit weird to sing because of syllables =P
I was thinking of maybe changing the first four notes of that line to "F-E-D-G" rather than "D-D-F-G", as you said, to make the syllables work.  What do you think?
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Hmmm... It could work out, 'cause timberwolves are evil and the next words proves it, so going down with tone should occur in exponentiation the... "fear"? =P
But after that, we would have to start "in" with... F? And go up by E-E-D or E-D-D.

Why do chemists call helium, curium, and barium 'the medical elements'? Because, if you can't 'helium' or 'curium', you 'BARIUM'! Heheh."

Travius Trott

So, I noticed that some 'alliance' group appeared.
'Herds of Equestria' they called it.

So here there is basically three choices, to join it, to stay out of it, or to go against it.
But I trust that the last option is one that I would not support, and I will leave a poll up for the other options, also feel free to voice your own opinion on the subject.
The main reason I am not all determined to have up join it is that I like to know just who this herd is allied to.

Oh, it would appear that I got some fancy title, Notable pony, now that's something that I had not expected to gain.
Thanks everypony, for this most brilliant thing.

daswed

I´d say that it´s better to have many allies rather than too few.

The Wandering Magus

2012 Jun 15, 12:57:03 #327 Last Edit: 2012 Jun 15, 13:00:11 by The Wandering Magus
On the alliance, I think being a part of it would be good, although we should probably not be TOO reliant on it.  Maybe be a sort of cursory friend, but staying neutral?  Kind of like the Switzerland of herds?

Quote from: Trilight Dashie on 2012 Jun 15, 11:49:52
Hmmm... It could work out, 'cause timberwolves are evil and the next words proves it, so going down with tone should occur in exponentiation the... "fear"? =P
But after that, we would have to start "in" with... F? And go up by E-E-D or E-D-D.

I have no idea :P which verse should start with F-E-D-D ?

oh, and added some more verses, as requested!

Far over the Canterlot Mountains tall,
To Luna's keep, Celestia's hall.
Timberwolves howl in the dark;
The dragons come to leave their mark.
The clouds turn pink,
Our spirits sink,
Equestria fell to Discord's might,
But we returned, him for to smite!

But vict'ry was tempered with mourning.
Suffering ponies, our actions scorning
Showed us the pain that Discord had left,
And though we'd won, of joy we were bereft.
For traveller's aid,
A Blessing we made.
From fair Canterlot out to the world
We travelled Equestria with banners unfurled.

And over the years our numbers grew small,
For our group unicorns alone did call.
And so at last we opened up our herd,
And in non-unicorns our group conferred.
And then once more
In days of yore,
We walked the paths Equestrian
To help the lost pedestrian.

Now, long after those dark days,
Our Watchers strong still guard the ways.
And though we finished all our founders willed,
And we the land with peace have filled
We carry on,
With every dawn,
To finish now our herd's new goal:
To help each stallion, mare and foal.

Once again we climb the mountains tall,
In triumph over Discord's fall!
Our friendships held, our honesty stood strong.
Our kindness grew; our laughter in song
A generous gift
Friends to uplift.
The Traveller's Blessing, wanderer's friend,
Equestria's roads we still defend!


I think some of the verses screw with the melody a bit, but that also fits with the suggestion to change the tune around a bit for the middle verses.  What do you all think?
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Trilight Dashie

2012 Jun 15, 13:45:51 #328 Last Edit: 2012 Jun 15, 15:06:37 by Trilight Dashie
Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Jun 15, 12:57:03
On the alliance, I think being a part of it would be good, although we should probably not be TOO reliant on it.  Maybe be a sort of cursory friend, but staying neutral?  Kind of like the Switzerland of herds?

Quote from: Trilight Dashie on 2012 Jun 15, 11:49:52
Hmmm... It could work out, 'cause timberwolves are evil and the next words proves it, so going down with tone should occur in exponentiation the... "fear"? =P
But after that, we would have to start "in" with... F? And go up by E-E-D or E-D-D.

I have no idea :P which verse should start with F-E-D-D ?

oh, and added some more verses, as requested!

Far over the Canterlot Mountains tall,
To Luna's keep, Celestia's hall.
Timberwolves howl in the dark;
The dragons come to leave their mark.
The clouds turn pink,
Our spirits sink,
Equestria fell to Discord's might,
But we returned, him for to smite!

But vict'ry was tempered with mourning.
Suffering ponies, our actions scorning
Showed us the pain that Discord had left,
And though we'd won, of joy we were bereft.
For traveller's aid,
A Blessing we made.
From fair Canterlot out to the world
We travelled Equestria with banners unfurled.

And over the years our numbers grew small,
For our group unicorns alone did call.
And so at last we opened up our herd,
And in non-unicorns our group conferred.
And then once more
In days of yore,
We walked the paths Equestrian
To help the lost pedestrian.

Now, long after those dark days,
Our Watchers strong still guard the ways.
And though we finished all our founders willed,
And we the land with peace have filled
We carry on,
With every dawn,
To finish now our herd's new goal:
To help each stallion, mare and foal.

Once again we climb the mountains tall,
In triumph over Discord's fall!
Our friendships held, our honesty stood strong.
Our kindness grew; our laughter in song
A generous gift
Friends to uplift.
The Traveller's Blessing, wanderer's friend,
Equestria's roads we still defend!


I think some of the verses screw with the melody a bit, but that also fits with the suggestion to change the tune around a bit for the middle verses.  What do you all think?

5 verses = 5 times song loop ovO

About this F-E-D-D : nevermind, forget it lol

EDIT:
Just found out:
Proper rhythm ends and "Equestria fell to Discord's might," and after this line I can't imagine how to sing "But we returned, him for to smite!"
Also, how do you think we should start second verse? First line doesn't fit with loop. I mean, it doesn't fit with "Far over bla bla bla".

Why do chemists call helium, curium, and barium 'the medical elements'? Because, if you can't 'helium' or 'curium', you 'BARIUM'! Heheh."

The Wandering Magus

I think some of the lines should be reorganized x3

And o'er the years our numbers grew small,
For unicorns alone did our group call.
And so at last we opened up our herd,
And in non-unicorns conferred.
And then once more
In days of yore,
We walked the paths Equestrian
To help the lost pedestrian.

Now, long after those dark days,
Our Watchers strong still guard the ways.
And though we finished all our founders willed,
And we with peace the land have filled
We carry on,
With every dawn,
To finish now our herd's new goal:
To help each stallion, mare and foal.


how's that?
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Sotha

2012 Jun 16, 02:09:34 #330 Last Edit: 2012 Jun 16, 02:14:51 by Sotha
Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Jun 16, 01:36:29
I think some of the lines should be reorganized x3

And o'er the years our numbers grew small,
For unicorns alone did our group call.
And so at last we opened up our herd,
And in non-unicorns conferred.
And then once more
In days of yore,
We walked the paths Equestrian
To help the lost pedestrian.

Now, long after those dark days,
Our Watchers strong still guard the ways.
And though we finished all our founders willed,
And we with peace the land have filled
We carry on,
With every dawn,
To finish now our herd's new goal:
To help each stallion, mare and foal.


how's that?


I'm sorry! I still haven't actually listened to sound of the song and see about its rhythm. I'm too busy listening to Janelle Monae's The ArchAndroid right now...

The new verses are nice. The third feels a little weak story-wise -- I mean, while it was a part of the history of the group, it just doesn't feel like material one would want to epic in song, but that's just me. I really like the fourth, though. Especially its opening lines, with "Our Watchers strong still guard the ways."


As for this Herds of Equestria business, while their goal seems amicable, I think we should remain respectively neutral. Not join it, but not be against it. If the entire purpose of Traveler's Blessing is oriented towards travelers, it just seems unsuiting to extend itself past that.
Also: It seems that I can't vote...
May you walk on warm sands.

The Wandering Magus

Quote from: Sotha on 2012 Jun 16, 02:09:34
Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Jun 16, 01:36:29
I think some of the lines should be reorganized x3

And o'er the years our numbers grew small,
For unicorns alone did our group call.
And so at last we opened up our herd,
And in non-unicorns conferred.
And then once more
In days of yore,
We walked the paths Equestrian
To help the lost pedestrian.

Now, long after those dark days,
Our Watchers strong still guard the ways.
And though we finished all our founders willed,
And we with peace the land have filled
We carry on,
With every dawn,
To finish now our herd's new goal:
To help each stallion, mare and foal.


how's that?


I'm sorry! I still haven't actually listened to sound of the song and see about its rhythm. I'm too busy listening to Janelle Monae's The ArchAndroid right now...

The new verses are nice. The third feels a little weak story-wise -- I mean, while it was a part of the history of the group, it just doesn't feel like material one would want to epic in song, but that's just me. I really like the fourth, though. Especially its opening lines, with "Our Watchers strong still guard the ways."


As for this Herds of Equestria business, while their goal seems amicable, I think we should remain respectively neutral. Not join it, but not be against it. If the entire purpose of Traveler's Blessing is oriented towards travelers, it just seems unsuiting to extend itself past that.
Also: It seems that I can't vote...
The third verse can be left out if you want x3 I just decided to summarize the whole thing since that's what you suggested before.  Any other suggestions for improving the song?  What do you think of the ending to the last verse now?  I changed it a bit after you noted it sounded a bit weak x3

I can't seem to vote either...
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daswed

It seems that I´m the only one who can vote so far, strange.

The Wandering Magus

Quote from: daswed on 2012 Jun 16, 02:30:35
It seems that I´m the only one who can vote so far, strange.
you can vote? odd... we should probably send a note to Site Suggestions and Bugs?
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daswed

I voted yesterday, but yeah, if nopony else can vote we should report it.

Ezio Auditore da Firenze

Nope, can't vote either.

By the way LoE forum type people mods, where are the big mac emoticons?!
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The Wandering Magus

Quote from: Ezio Auditore da Firenze on 2012 Jun 16, 02:57:45
Nope, can't vote either.

By the way LoE forum type people mods, where are the big mac emoticons?!
here. -.-
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Sotha

2012 Jun 16, 02:59:29 #337 Last Edit: 2012 Jun 16, 03:08:56 by Sotha
Quote from: daswed on 2012 Jun 16, 02:47:50
I voted yesterday, but yeah, if nopony else can vote we should report it.

When you say you voted yesterday, does that mean that you voted on this poll yesterday, or that you voted on a different poll yesterday. Because my hypothesis was that it is the ponies who voted on the previous poll held on this thread that are unable to vote on this one.
May you walk on warm sands.

daswed

Well, you can see that there´s only one member who has voted on this poll, and that´s me.

Sotha

Quote from: The Wandering Magus on 2012 Jun 16, 02:29:20The third verse can be left out if you want x3 I just decided to summarize the whole thing since that's what you suggested before.  Any other suggestions for improving the song?  What do you think of the ending to the last verse now?  I changed it a bit after you noted it sounded a bit weak x3


Mmm, yeah. There's a subtle difference between summarising a story and in my words, epic-ing it into song. Or I'm just spouting nonsense.

I like the revised fifth verse. The ending actually feels personal to Traveler's Blessing.
May you walk on warm sands.

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