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WARNING: This characters is not so much of 'my character' as much as it is merely a pony representation of an already-existing character from a different franchise.  With this, it's fair to say that anyone may use this character.

Name: Kobayashi-sama-san-chan
Original Series: Girlchan In Paradise
Type: Earth Pony
Coat: Dark Brown (He has 'the same eyes as Yusuke')
Mane/Tail: Black-ish Brown
Eyes: Turquoise (PLEASE take note: That thing above his eye is an eyebrow, not a gash or scratch or whatever)
Personality: No one knows, really

Possessions: 1 pair of Yellow Kung-Fu Pants

Abilities: He know the Striking Spin-Whirling Bencho-hatsu Technique; However, what it actually does is anyone's guess.  He may or may not have other abilities that we don't know of.

Traits: How the heck am I supposed to know?
Favorite Place: The Playground
Favorite Color: :S
Favorite Meal: Possibly Sushi (AKA: Hotdogs) (YES: This means he is one of the few ponies that actually eat meat)
Affiliation: Unknown
Cutie Mark: Can't be seen through his pants; no one knows because even WHEN he takes off his pants, it's censored.
Talent: Doing the Striking Spin-Whirling Bencho-hatsu Technique
Occupation: No one knows.

Bio: No one knows much about him except for his brother Yusuke.  However, at one point he played volleyball with Kenstar, and at another point he taught Yusuke the Striking Spin-Whirling Bencho-hatsu Technique (Which he has yet to use).

Appearance:
Spoiler: show
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Original Characters / Re: Zap
2013 Jun 30, 18:16:34
Cool! ouo
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Original Characters / Re: Comedy Gold
2013 Jun 30, 10:01:26
Quote from: Tiger on 2013 Jun 29, 23:49:38
I think Asterian is talking about how the monsters actually have gold in the first place.

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Original Characters / Re: Comedy Gold
2013 Jun 29, 23:43:39
Quote from: Asterian on 2013 Jun 29, 15:18:43
Okay, pointing the usual stuff out...

This character is the most down-to-earth of your three characters, and since he isn't a prince or an Alicorn, there's no argument there.

However, I find it unlikely that an emperor would be homeless. A vagabond is somepony who wanders around aimlessly with no place to call home. Comedy Gold on the other hoof actually has one, a fortress as you say.

Taking gold from monsters... This sounds like something straight out of an MMORPG. Most creatures in Equestria are unintelligent and thus don't even bother with gold or things of worth like that, so I deem it highly unlikely that your character could amass a wealth as you depict from slaying monsters. Perhaps he knows an alchemical spell that allows him to  transform baser metals like iron into ones of some worth?

His Cutie Mark story. Everypony wants to know how somepony else got their Cutie Mark. You provide no story as to this and say "it just happened". Earning a Cutie Mark does just happen, but it doesn't just happen like that, plus having a Cutie Mark story makes it look like you've put some thought into your OC.

I suggest adding a Cutie Mark story, removing the "vagabond" title, and providing explanation as to how he got rich off of monsters other than saying he looted it.

You're right.

But with all due respect, {massively making profit from monster slaying} can be quite the fast experience if you know what you're doing.
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Original Characters / Re: Lord of Madness
2013 Jun 29, 19:32:13
I'd say ten, but I know a Sheogorath Pony tumblr.
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Original Characters / Re: Swift Task
2013 Jun 29, 19:21:17
Quote from: Asterian on 2013 Jun 29, 15:03:31
You seem to like making Alicorn OCs, but don't we all?

Your English needs some work, though.
"Then one day that arrived a few days after that one day, Diamond Dogs."
You also repeat the word "time" to the point of where it feels like I'm in a Doctor Who episode.

Going straight away, this character sounds overpowered to me. In the abilities description, you say he can cast up to twenty spells at a time without loss of stamina. I should point out that Unicorn magic is fueled by will and focus, not strength and stamina. Also, if you're saying "twenty spells" as in "twenty completely different spells", then I must say that's impossible. I haven't seen a single instance in which a pony in the show or otherwise has performed just two spells simultaneously, let alone twenty, completely different ones.

Also, how is he royalty or an Alicorn? I see you'd rather leave that a mystery, but like your other OC, there needs to be a reason. They don't just make anypony an Alicorn.

Having said all that, I think this character is more approachable than your other one, but you need to blot some things out. Try just making him a Unicorn and perhaps providing a little more clarity to his story.

With all due respect, I must say"To each person his own opinion".
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Quote from: Nala Valor on 2013 Jun 29, 14:01:04
Quote from: Alexander321 on 2013 Jun 29, 13:54:22
Quote from: Shadow Mare on 2013 Jun 24, 15:57:59
I seen something like that... I wish I had a PC...

If you don't have a PC, how are you talking to us?   o.O
cellphone/iPod/ps3/wii/Xbox 360.

:I
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Quote from: Shadow Mare on 2013 Jun 24, 15:57:59
I seen something like that... I wish I had a PC...

If you don't have a PC, how are you talking to us?   o.O
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Original Characters / Prince Star Prance
2013 Jun 29, 13:38:25
WARNING: The following character may or may not be Overpowered.

Name: Star Prance
Type: Alicorn
Coat: Mint Green
Mane & Tail: Indigo Blue
Eyes: Maroon(?)
Personality: Two words describe him far too well: Royal snob.  He calls anyone not rich or royal a 'commoner', and tends to look down at such people.  He is also boastful of his power.  Funniest thing is: His parents aren't {around} for him to prove that he's royalty.

Possessions: 17 sets of rust-resistant armor (They all have the awkward design of only covering his 'torso' and limbs) (He'd be caught dead if he were to be caught without a suit of armor), 7,000 butterflies of different sorts (They all hide at some spots here and there, and no one ever pays attention to them; butterflies are the only creatures that he doesn't need the Gluttonous Gift Curse to tame), 1 Hoof Polisher, 1 Purple Raccoon, 1 Living Popsicle, 1 Living Bubble

Abilities: Regardless of being an Alicorn, he only knows of so many spells:

-Banishment Curse (Can only be used on New Moon nights, and only once per), which can....well, banish people.  But into ghostly forms that are unable to react with or be seen by anyone else; however, they can only be heard by Prince Star Prance.  Beings under the Banishment Curse are temporarily (Depending on how long Star Prance wishes them to be under such a curse) immortal, and therefore do not age within this state.

-Relief Spell (Can only be used on Full Moons), which disables the Banishment Curse.

-Power Beam, which, as you can guess, is his strongest move.  Literally {Magically disapoofs} anything in range, albeit it can be used only so often, as well as limited range (Maximum of, in comparison, ten ponies long).

-Butterfly Shield Spell, which not only can disrupt his foes when they swarm around his foes, but also render mostly any spell used on them useless when formed into a condensed mass (Like a shield).

-Gluttonous Gift Curse, which is the summoning of a humongous (Size of an eyeball) piece of candy wrapped perfectly in a blue candy wrapper, is the sort of curse used for persuasion; works more often on animals, as they don't tend to have the brains to know that big food actually means trappings.  Anywho, those who consume the candy are filled with hypnotic magic, forcing the consumer to obey the whims of the being that summoned the candy.

He is sturdier than the average pony, although not as sturdy as, say, Big Macintosh.  However, he doesn't call himself the strongest for nothing; an average buck from this guy could almost {make very unhappy} unicorns.  It merely knocks out all other sorts of ponies. Power against other creatures may vary.

-What he lacks in complete strength, he makes up in stamina, to the extent of practically always standing back up strong even from taking a very heavy blow.  People tend to call him a stubborn fighter, with his refusal for surrender.

Traits: Jerk, Snob, Prideful, Caring (Only for family), Strong
Favorite Place: Anywhere but very dirty places
Favorite Color: His eyes
Favorite Food: Anything fancy
Affiliation: Himself, His family
Cutie Mark: A fist
Talent: Being powerful
Occupation: Prince (Only he knows of his title), Vagabond (Everyone else considers him this; and can't blame them because he travels a lot)

Bio: SPOILERS.

Appearance:
Spoiler: show
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Original Characters / Swift Task
2013 Jun 29, 12:36:37
Name: Swift Task
Type: Curly-Horned Unicorn (Technically Alicorn, but he's cursed into the state of a Unicorn and no one knows of his Alicorn origins {Not even himself} except for his only brother {Who cannot be found})
Coat: Yellow
Mane & Tail: Black
Eyes: Indigo
Personality: For the most part, he seems emotionless, with the oftentimes of him simply giving everyone his look of emotionlessness.  He can still feel them, although at minimal levels, unless something very emotional happens.

Possessions: 1 tuxedo.  That's it.

Abilities: Can cast magic, duh.  However, unlike Comedy Gold, he can cast many spells at one time. up to twenty, and still have normal stamina.  He's practically a saint (Kindness-wise, not religious-wise) in almost every way, from being the most patient pony out there to being, perhaps, the most charitable (If he weren't restricted by his Comedy Gold's demands).  He lives up to his cutie mark; he was born to serve, and does his orders through and through.

Traits: Respectful, Charitable, Kind, Understanding, Smart, Humble
Favorite Place: Won't say
Favorite Color: Doesn't know
Favorite Meal: Whatever he is given for food
Affiliation: Comedy Gold's Cool Army Of Army Stuff That Isn't So Army-Ish (CAOASTISAI)
Cutie Mark: Serving Platter
Talent: Fulfilling the wishes and needs of others
Occupation: Lifetime Servant of Comedy Gold, Soldier (CAOASTISAI)

Bio: The following is only as it is said by Swift Task.

Once upon a time, there lived a normal couple with a normal living style in a normal town that was not Ponyville.  One day, the two were soooo happy that they {created through science} a normal colt together, and named it Swift Task for reasons unknown.  From this, they had set for themselves a paradise of a lifetime, having each other, a glorious colt, and a grand lifestyle.  Everything was perfect.

Then one day that arrived a few days after that one day, Diamond Dogs.

And that was not only how the mother was forced upon the title of a betrayer of her husband, as she was voilently {loved}, but also how they ended up with a lot of physical hurt, lost goods, and the disappearance of their only child, Swift Task.

Upon having performed the scandal, the Dogs took their prized loot with them to their caves to enjoy for the rest of their lives.  The ate most of the food, wore down the furniture, and worked Swift Task, day in, day out, to the brink of {lack of any happiness}, which got him his cutie mark.  Just then...

A peculiarly handsome brown-furred, brown-haired Colt arrived with a stupid dragon costume upon him.  Upon the sight of such a horror, the Diamond Dogs took flight (fled) and escaped miles from the spot.  Being praised with the blessing of a hero to rescue him from times of pure horror, Swift Task solemnly swears his life to Comedy Gold, and trots out of the horror of the place with his new-found master.

To this day, he sort of regrets having made that vow.  Of course, he has his good days with him, what with a break every now and then, and grand rewards for such terrific jobs.

Appearance(s):
Spoiler: show
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Original Characters / Re: Comedy Gold
2013 Jun 29, 00:01:04
Quote from: GlassMirror on 2013 Jun 28, 23:51:34
If he takes gold from monsters, why does his name have comedy in it? I thought he was a comedian.  o.O
Probably missed this if you said something about it.

It's a long story, sorry.  You see, there are a few things about this guy:

1) He used to be a mere self-insertion of myself.

2) I remembered a funny book called Comedy Gold from that show Chowder, and I found myself as funny, sooooo hence the name.

3) He had the habit of gold looting as a reference to the fact that I like Adventure Quest.

4) I liked Adventure Quest so much because I literally payed the $60.00 for the best membership X-Guardian membership.  I loved it so much, I even went over the line of making him OP with ridiculous magicks, strength, and gear and whatnot (If you see http://guardian.battleon.com/Build30/charview.asp?temp=10849315 , you'll see what I mean).

5) My original idea of his cutie mark was that he'd have a Gorillion dollar for a cutie mark.  That was it.  But I wanted to give it purpose.  Sooooo I decided to go with the "He's good at anything starting with the letter G" train.

6) Months after his creation, I had seen how stupid my self-insertion was, and I wanted to back off from the ideas of self-insertions.  Sooo I fixed up his skills, history, and whatnot to refrain from being, well, just simply what I wa---

7) IT'S COMPLICATED, OKAY???
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Original Characters / Re: Comedy Gold
2013 Jun 28, 23:45:44
Quote from: Shadow Mare on 2013 Jun 28, 23:43:40
What? The Diamond Dogs may not be the smartest, but pretty sure they can tell the difference between a dragon and a pony.

Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeelllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll maybe they're just that stoopid. =3=
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Original Characters / Comedy Gold
2013 Jun 28, 23:24:10
Name: Comedy Gold
Type: Unicorn
Coat: light brown / tan
Mane & Tail: Brown / Dark Brown
Eyes: Green (Sometimes, if you look at them in a funky way, they look dull blue)
Personality: Humorous; to an extent, much like Pinkie Pie.  However, can be emotional and be bothered by personal matters to the point of psychological breakdown

Possessions: 1 Gigantic Flying House Fortress, 1 butler (Swift Task), 1 baby gorilla (Frank), 1 top hat, 3 Tuxedos (AKA: 'Monkey Suits'), 7 different roses, A picture of himself with Gilda (plans of destroying it are imminent), 1 Magical Banana Machine, 1 Magical Backpack, >7000 Granny Smith Apples (Preserved in a large, magical station of the Fortress), 1800+ Bananas (And counting) (Also preserved)

Abilities: Can use magic (duh), sturdy (By a small margin), can look really good in a 'monkey suit' (AKA: A tuxedo)

Traits: Goofy, Half-Rich, Friendly, Smart-ish
Favorite Place: His gigantic flying house fortress
Favorite Color: Blue or green; he's boyish like that
Favorite Meal: Salad & Granny Smith Apples
Most Like: Pinkie Pie
Affiliation: Comedy Gold's Cool Army Of Army Stuff That Isn't So Army-Ish
Cutie Mark: The Gorillion Dollar
Talent: Obtaining gold from defeated monsters, being silly
Occupation: Holy Roman Emperor (Of his army, which consists only of his butler, Swift Task),  Vagabond Comedian, Donator, Monster Slayer (Not his strong forte)

Bio: Upon one of his very young birthdays, he was literally kicked out of the house, to be never given much of a {care} for, as he survives a long while in the wilderness.  Anywho, at one point in time of such utter survival, he stumbled upon a cave with which there was a poor colt caught in the grip of some Diamond Dogs.  However, due to them being unintelligent as well, they all thought he was a dragon, and fled for their lives.  Having been saved, the gentlecolt by the name of Swift Task swore his life to Comedy's services (Obviously they were colts at the time), thus making him a permanent ally, servant, and best friend (sorta).

With the two having formed together, they went off to do adventures of many a sort.  This lasted for many months, and kinda still is lasting to this day.

Q: How did he get his cutie mark?

A: There WAS a story about that, but that was when he was OP.  So instead, the story to it is: It.........just happened, okay?  Yeah, okay.  It happened.  One moment, walking.  Next moment, BANG!  Cutie Mark.

Q: Watch the language, sir...

A: Sorry; I had copied + pasted from a Tumblr. post of mine about him.  You see, back there, language isn't too big of a deal.  Most apologies though.  I'll be sure to properly censor anything that appears naughty.  ;n;

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