Fire diamond

[Snowy]

Name: Fire diamond

gender: mare

race: Unicorn

age: 16

cutie mark: A crystal on fire

talent(s): Using her fire to burn things down. She can turn into a shadow to sneak around.

fears: ice, snow, water.

backstory: Fire diamond was an only child. She lived in canterlot with her mother and  father. They were  very rich. She got almost everything she wanted, if she acted "like a unicorn" should. She became greedy over the years. One day her father lost his job and they had to live in the middle class part of canterlot. She hated every moment of it. One day she asked her father for a diamond necklace. He refused. Since he lost his job, he didn't have the money he used to. She ran out the living room and into her room. She cried till she got the idea of burning the factory down, with a match. It was late at night. She got her saddle bag, and
filled it was dangerous explosives. When she go there, she got all her traps, amd matches ready, and set them on fire. She stood there, watching not caring if anyone was in there or not. When it exploded, and ran. But the force hit her anyway. She fell over, passed out. A day later her parents came looking for her. They found the burned down factory. She never told them about the factory till this day. She earned her cutie mark the day after they found her with the burned down factory. Almost like a delay, when it was suppose to come when she blew it up.

personality: Can be very greedy sometimes, can nice when she wants to, mean, hates to be offered help.

power: making fire balls come from her horn. She uses this power when someone doesn't give her something. She used fire magic.

likes: heat, fire, diamonds, money.

dislikes: ponies that dont give her things, ponies trying to be nice to her, water, ice, snow.

strengths: fire, heat.

weakness: anything that has to do with water.

now: She lives in ponyville with her dragon Fifft. She doesn't have a job, but shes gets lots of money from her parents


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(She will be used in-game like Snow dash ))

[Gracie Sky]

 

I haven't really seen a pony with such an abrasive personality. It sounds like her parents have spoiled her pretty badly, judging on how severe her selfishness is. She'll burn down a building out of revenge for not receiving a lucrative gift like a diamond from her father because he could not afford it...? And they still support her? That's pretty scary... in an intimidating way.

I wonder how she gets away with it all...




And please... You should properly capitalize your work.

[Stitchin Time]

Wow. Um, this is a... horrifying OC actually.

[Firefly]

That is... I don't know what to say about her to be honest e_e

I'm a pacifist to the core, so I guess I really shouldn't be expressing my views on this violent pony, to say the least 

I really liked how you based your previous OC on the element of snow, and how you made everything about her in related to snow and snowflakes. But after having one OC like that, I think another one would sound a bit cliche, although the concept of this character is quite unexpected (when one sees the word 'fire', they would immediately think about super powers or something, but apparently, this OC 'controls' and uses fire in a different way)

About her turning into a shadow, I really think that idea is a little bit overused in cartoons and things (especially with the growing popularity of 'ninjas' who are mostly dubbed as 'shadows of the night'). I wouldn't give her that 'shadow-transformation' ability if I were you; it seems totally unrelated to her main theme, which is fire.

In regards to her personality, I hardly think that this pony can be the least bit nice again. Less menacing, yes, but nice, no.  You have already stated that she would burn down a factory if she didn't get a diamond necklace she wanted. I hardly think that that kind of pony would be approachable.

Other questions you might consider:
1) If her parents lost their jobs and couldn't even afford a diamond necklace, how is it that they can still give her 'a lot of money' when she is in Ponyville?
2) Why would she want to go to Ponyville?
3) What has a 'crystal on fire' got to do with her 'talent' (note that cutiemarks are related to a pony's talent, not their names. So to be more specific, what has the  crystal got to do with her talent?)

Also, you could give a physical description of her, so that we can understand the story behind her name.

....

Please don't send Fire Diamond after me