Papyrus Mistrin, Oc need help critique.

[alexandas]

Name: Papyrus
Nicknames: ((somepony make one))
Age: Foal, since she was magically born she looks and acts around the age of a five year old though her age is zero
Gender: Filly
Residence: Spellsworth's library
Type/Species/Race: Allicorn
Personality: Kind, giving, loving, happy, gets annoyed easily, more
Art:

Spoiler: Papyrus pictures • show

Spoiler: Original pic vector by me • show

Talent: anything to do with paper and origami
Cutie mark: ((a piece of paper probably, not sure though))
Backstory: ((this is actually going to be how she came to be when i finish))
Relations with other ponies: Spellsworth = A dad like pony, sometimes more of a brother like pony, Cluoy = sister like friend, Skozam = friend
Quotes:
Fun facts: Her hair is paper like

Of course: I accept any art, and post it here.  Also me like critiques!

[Tiger]

Alicorns... 

Not to bad mouth you, it's just that most of us here dislike alicorns.

Right, let's get to critique-ing shall we?

Age: Foal, since he was magically born he looks and acts around apple blooms age though his age is zero

Fun facts: Her hair is paper like

So is it a he or a she??

How was she magically born? Was it a wizard's creation? Accidental science experiment? Please elaborate.

I honestly see no reason for her to be an alicorn. Her cutie mark is making paper things/origamis, and that has nothing to do with flight OR magic. You really should change her race, otherwise everyone would hate her just because she's an alicorn.

When you say her hair is paper like, is it literally like paper, or just normal hair that just looks flat, like in the picture?


Yeah, just please change her race. Many people like to pick on alicorns because of how overpowered they are.

[Midnight Breeze]

Was this just a coup fourré at AcidicHeart's alicorn OC?

[ComputerDeathglare]

Was this just a coup fourré at AcidicHeart's alicorn OC?

Lol, there's words I don't know.

[alexandas]

Alicorns... 

Not to bad mouth you, it's just that most of us here dislike alicorns.

Right, let's get to critique-ing shall we?

Age: Foal, since he was magically born he looks and acts around apple blooms age though his age is zero

Fun facts: Her hair is paper like

So is it a he or a she??

How was she magically born? Was it a wizard's creation? Accidental science magic experiment?. Please elaborate.

I honestly see no reason for her to be an alicorn. Her cutie mark is making paper things/origamis, and that has nothing to do with flight OR magic. You really should change her race, otherwise everyone would hate her just because she's an alicorn.

When you say her hair is paper like, is it literally like paper, or just normal hair that just looks flat, like in the picture?


Yeah, just please change her race. Many people like to pick on alicorns because of how overpowered they are.

If you want the answer to if I'm going to agree to change HER into a unicorn or pegasus from an allicorn here is the answer

And she's a she but was originally a boy until i thought it didn't work as well
how she was made by magic: I'M WRITING IT WAIT!

She's an allicorn because of how she was "born" and she's cuter as an allicorn and she's a paper goddess and im trying to make a point and she's cuter as an allicorn and because i simply want her to be able to fly and magic so she can learn from both her "mother" and "father" and anywho a PAPER GODDESS I'm trying to prove that allicorns and goddesses can be weak

and she's cuter as an allicorn!

Was this just a coup fourré at AcidicHeart's alicorn OC?

I don't exactly know what that means but no it's not coup fourr[e with accent] at accidicshearts allicorn
It's because i want to prove to the ponyverse that a non-OP allicorn is possible, I'm writing the story of her birth at the moment and vectoing her.

[Tiger]

If you want the answer to if I'm going to agree to change HER into a unicorn or pegasus from an alicorn here is the answer

And she's a she but was originally a boy until i thought it didn't work as well
how she was made by magic: I'M WRITING IT WAIT!

She's an alicorn because of how she was "born" and she's cuter as an alicorn and she's a paper goddess and im trying to make a point and she's cuter as an allicorn and because i simply want her to be able to fly and magic so she can learn from both her "mother" and "father" and anywho a PAPER GODDESS I'm trying to prove that alicorns and goddesses can be weak

and she's cuter as an allicorn!

Seriously though, I see no reason for her to be an alicorn. Being able to do BOTH magic and flight AND have the strength of an earth pony is overpowered already. Even if an alicorn is more specialised in magic than flight, she can STILL fly AND have a bunch of strength. There's just no way to un-op an alicorn unless you change their race.

Simply put, all alicorns are overpowered.

Remember when Gracie Sky tried to make a good OC alicorn?

Is a good OC Alicorn possible?

Many replies say that there's no reason for her to be an alicorn at all, and that she's still overpowered in all aspects.

Same here.

[alexandas]

Tiger, please please please don't get this thread locked like that one, because this allicorn has a purpose, and if you don't like that she's a paper goddess, that's fine.  Seriously the way she was born forces her to have to be an allicorn, and besides.  She is an allicorn, she's going to stay that way. And if you get this thread locked then who knows what i'll do, anyway i need to write the story of how she was born.

[Tiger]

Fine, do as you wish. Just don't blame me if no one likes her in roleplays.

[alexandas]

She's going to be the allicorn that proves that allicorns aren't op, and besides.  All changelings are allicorns because they have wings and horns.  So does nopony like them?  No.  So yeah.

[Tiger]

That's because their magic seems to only be for disguising into another pony.

[alexandas]

whatever. her magic is only paper related, it's basically the same but weeker, and besides she is a goddess, she's just not OP.

[Nala Valor]

Being a god forces you to be op, you know? find one god that's isn't op in any TV show/ Movie and don't you dare say yours isn't.

And also, if you want to be a god, just go in Magus' RolePlay "pony cosmology" everypony's a god there.

[alexandas]

she's not really a goddess, she's just an allicorn that is called by spellsworth at times "my little paper goddess"  she's a magic experiment gone wrong, and she's not op
((if anypony else tells me this i'm going to not respond, and maybe see if i can lock and unlock my own thread.))

[Tiger]

((if anypony else tells me this i'm going to not respond, and maybe see if i can lock and unlock my own thread.))

Not admitting your alicorn OC is OP? That's childish. Here we're telling you things to help improve your OC, and you shove us aside.

This is the problem with most ponies on the forums. Like Blues said, they can't take critiques at all 

[Midnight Breeze]

This thread totally sucks and is getting nowhere.

I say we all just hush.

[The Silent Wolf]

Personally, I like her. And as my personal text says, A race is just a race, no matter what it is. The whole "alacorns are op!" feels racist to me, as they are who they are. But personally I believe Papyrus Mistrin is adorable.

[alexandas]

((if anypony else tells me this i'm going to not respond, and maybe see if i can lock and unlock my own thread.))

Not admitting your alicorn OC is OP? That's childish. Here we're telling you things to help improve your OC, and you shove us aside.

This is the problem with most ponies on the forums. Like Blues said, they can't take critiques at all 

Tiger, that's not a critique of the kind i prefer, it's a 100% biased opinion, and i'm telling the truth, also

all ocs to some extent are op

and she's probably the least of all of mine

This thread totally sucks and is getting nowhere.

I say we all just hush.

I agree, but this is not a joke oc or a attempt to make a good allicorn
It's a character i'll be using.

Spoiler: show

If you want the answer to if I'm going to agree to change HER into a unicorn or pegasus from an alicorn here is the answer

And she's a she but was originally a boy until i thought it didn't work as well
how she was made by magic: I'M WRITING IT WAIT!

She's an alicorn because of how she was "born" and she's cuter as an alicorn and she's a paper goddess and im trying to make a point and she's cuter as an allicorn and because i simply want her to be able to fly and magic so she can learn from both her "mother" and "father" and anywho a PAPER GODDESS I'm trying to prove that alicorns and goddesses can be weak

and she's cuter as an allicorn!

Seriously though, I see no reason for her to be an alicorn. Being able to do BOTH magic and flight AND have the strength of an earth pony is overpowered already. Even if an alicorn is more specialised in magic than flight, she can STILL fly AND have a bunch of strength. There's just no way to un-op an alicorn unless you change their race.

Simply put, all alicorns are overpowered.

Remember when Gracie Sky tried to make a good OC alicorn?

Is a good OC Alicorn possible?

Many replies say that there's no reason for her to be an alicorn at all, and that she's still overpowered in all aspects.

Same here.

she is an allicorn for one specific reason, her "mother" is pegasus her "father" is unicorn, and this makes it possible that she can be taught by both

Personally, I like her. And as my personal text says, A race is just a race, no matter what it is. The whole "alacorns are op!" feels racist to me, as they are who they are. But personally I believe Papyrus Mistrin is adorable.

You are AWESOME!  And understand

[ComputerDeathglare]

Honestly, I think she's ad'aaawwwable. I hate ponies who hate alicorns. Seriously, what's wrong with them? I've seen unicorns and pegasi more OP than some alicorns.

[Tiger]

Having parents that is a pegasus and a unicorn does NOT make an alicorn. How much do we have to stress this?

Although I'm probably getting it wrong since you said she was born by magic or something so technically they're not her REAL parents and she doesn't have any parents or something 

Anyway, I'll leave this be. I don't want flame wars. Let's pour water over it and let this issue rest 

[ComputerDeathglare]

Flames wars... I love flam- oh, oh you mean the childish insults that get threads closed? Okay.